A "Glow" is a detail / expectation in the example that is well done.
A"Grow" is a detail / expectation in the example that needs improvement.
They can be about Grammar and Mechanics, Vocabulary and Word Choice, Organization and Cohesion, Evidence and Support, and Critical Thinking and Analysis:
I need two grows and two glows from this blog below
As technology is becoming more readily available for students, there may be a shortage in some schools for the number of computers provided to the students for use. However, many teachers provide coursework online for students to access. This may result easier for some students than others to retrieve this schoolwork. If students who already own cell phones were to bring their own devices to school, they could easily access their schoolwork with the tap of a finger. As a result, those who can access technology more easily than others could help those students who aren’t able to bring their own devices from home. These handheld devices are fascinating when it comes to the number of things they can do. For example, according to Simona Johns, a former school teacher, “students can use their cell phones to conduct research, answering classroom polling questions, or even type their responses to questions or essays.”
Additionally, according to Tim Floyd, a school teacher, “ Students who might not have access to computers at home can type and submit essays on their phones. Students can quickly look up some information and verify its validity.” As explained, cell phones may be used in a number of ways and is profoundly affecting students day to day lives in a positive way. The value of cell phones should not be ignored, rather it should be used to its fullest potential. Furthermore, Tim Floyd adds, “students can also use their cell phones to collaborate with their peers.” This indisputable fact provided by this highly esteemed educator should be acknowledged as it not only helps students complete their work but also helps them to build skills collaborating with others, which will help them in the workforce. As seen, this handheld device is a great tool for students to use to advance their learning in a efficient manner.
Cell phones maintains students safe and helps with communication.Safety is the main concern for students and their parents. To maintain students’ safe, cell phones should not be banned from using at school. Cell phones can be used by students to contact their parents in case of an emergency; whether it applies to students on campus or off campus. A common problem faced in these troubling times is that of a terrorist threat. If students do not have their cellular devices, how would they be able to let their parents be aware of the situation as it unfolds? Moreover, many students walk to school, and if cell phones were banned, students wouldn’t be able to communicate with their parents, which is a huge safety concern. In addition, those who stay after school need to stay in touch with their parents to be picked up at the proper time.
As seen, communication with cellular devices is vital for students’ safety. Furthermore, communication with cellular devices comes in handy when students need help from a teacher. This way students can ask their teachers questions and feedback about an assignment at any time. Besides, when it comes to bullying, whether it be in person or online, a student may not feel comfortable sharing that information with a teacher in person, and would rather text them about it. If students are enabled to use these devices at school they could feel more comfortable reaching out for help and talking to a responsible adult through this medium. With the help of these pocket-sized devices, students can live a safer life, which everyone deserves the right to.
The ultimate goal for a student is to set up their future and be better prepared for it. Technology facilitates this process and makes that transition easier. Whether a student is aiming for a job dealing with technology or not, it is a very helpful tool that prepares those who use it efficiently. As students get more familiar with technology and better utilize it, this will help them in the future when they are looking for a job. Many job employers are looking to hire those who know how to utilize these devices. On that note, students must learn to use these devices efficiently to maximize the possibilities of being hired in the future.
Without a doubt, technology will keep advancing in the future. This will enable students who use technology already a boost of confidence for the future. As technology connects students with tools and resources, they are better able to get a better understanding of how to use them. According to the article, “How Does Technology Prepare Students for the Future?” this will help them in developing the habits of working through different tasks in different ways. In turn, they will be “better equipped to find alternate solutions and ways of doing things.” As a result, students are expanding their understanding of technology and setting themselves up for a bright future.
On the other hand, some people argue that involving cell phones in students’ education may permit entry for cyberbullying. This way of thinking makes sense because cyberbullying is on the rise and many people worry for the students well being. In particular, parents are most worried about their child’s well-being. This point of view is rather considerate as most people do not want anyone to experience this form of harassment. However, if a child owns a cellular device already, they are exposed to this form of bullying at home, or wherever they may take the device with them. Therefore, banning cell phones in classrooms will not stop cyberbullying from occurring.
It should be noted, that bullying takes many forms, including cyberbullying, but banning cellular devices on school campuses will not stop bullying, but rather worsen it. The source of the problem of bullying should be stopped, which does not involve banning the use of cellular devices in school. Instead, students can be taught at school about the proper cell phone etiquette, which can help create them into “digitally responsible citizens.” According to Cristina, a school teacher, “When students have access to technology and social media, they have access to empowerment and leadership online…When students are given the chance to use their cellphones in class as a learning tool, we can teach them how to positively influence and impact other people online.” As indicated by this trustworthy educator, students will learn many valuable lessons about how to respect and treat others, while learning to use this type of technology. This way, students will be better prepared in the future knowing how to interact with others respectfully using this form of communication, and help solve the root of the problem of bullying.
Grows:
1. Grammar and Mechanics: There are some errors in punctuation and capitalization throughout the excerpt that need improvement. For example, there is inconsistent capitalization of the word "cell" in "students can use their cell phones" and "students have access to technology and social media." Consistency and correct usage of capitalization and punctuation is important for clarity and professionalism.
2. Organization and Cohesion: The structure of the excerpt could be improved for better organization and cohesion. The introduction could clearly state the main argument and the subsequent paragraphs could focus on specific supporting points. Better transitions between ideas and paragraphs would also improve the overall flow and readability of the excerpt.
Glows:
1. Evidence and Support: The excerpt provides several examples, such as quotes from teachers and references to articles, to support the argument that cell phones can enhance education. These examples provide credibility and strengthen the author's position.
2. Critical Thinking and Analysis: The author critically analyzes the counterargument of cyberbullying and effectively counters it by emphasizing the importance of teaching proper cell phone etiquette and digital responsibility. This demonstrates thoughtful consideration of opposing views and a well-rounded argument.