below will be a grade 4 student paragraph about family. use 80 to 100 words to assess the strengths and weaknesses and outline at least one recommendation for improvement of the child’s writing proficiency.
I am going to tell you about my family my father works two jobs one at amazon and a next job but I don't remember the job's name. My mother is a principal and has a school she is a hard working person and is loving too. I love her very much. Then you have my little brother he is my favourite person in my family right now he is very cute, funny and rude that why he is my favourite. That is my I love tell very much.
Strengths: The student shows a good understanding of family structure and relationships. They use descriptive language to talk about each family member and express love for them.
Weaknesses: The paragraph lacks proper punctuation and could benefit from better organization. The student also repeats "I love" multiple times, which could be improved by using different language to express their feelings.
Recommendation: Encourage the student to vary their sentence structure and use transitional words to create a more cohesive paragraph. Additionally, practice using punctuation correctly to improve the flow of their writing.