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Use the sentence to complete the activity.

The child held on to his mother as the train went by the platform.

the words child, held on, Train, and went are the words that are underlined

Revise the sentence by making the underlined words more precise, adding at least one adjective or adverb, and adding at least one sensory detail.

(Completely original and like a 8th grader wrote it)

The scared child tightly clung to his mother's hand as the loud, roaring train swiftly passed by the crowded platform, blowing a gust of hot, smoky air in their faces.

can it be a bit longer?

The scared little child tightly clung to his mother's hand, his tiny fingers wrapped around her worn palm, as the massive, deafening train loudly rumbled by the bustling platform. The vibrations from the speeding train sent trembling shivers through both of them, while a rush of hot, sooty air blew past, engulfing them in its gritty embrace.