Use the sentence to complete the activity.

The child held on to his mother as the train went by the platform.
Revise the sentence by making the underlined words more precise, adding at least one adjective or adverb, and adding at least one sensory detail.

The scared child tightly clung to his comforting mother's hand as the loud train roared past the crowded platform, its screeching wheels filling the air with an unsettling sound.