AP English Literature
posted by Melissa
I'm doing a research essay about "anchor babies", or in other words, babies born from illegal immigrants.
How would you write a good thesis?

Ms. Sue
What do you want to say about these babies?

Writeacher
Your thesis statement must include factual information plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)
http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements. 
Melissa
I basically want to solve this problem and I want to talk about people's reaction, pros & cons, etc.

Writeacher
Solve what problem? State the problem clearly in one sentence. (Ignore the rest for now.)

Ms. Sue
As Writeacher said, you need to take a position on this question. How would you solve this "problem"? Your solution should be stated in your thesis.

Melissa
Well so far I have my intro.
which is this:
Throughout the years, it has been known that if one's newborn is born in America, they have automatic citizenship, regardless of what their parent's situation may be; which is what the 14th Amendment states. Illegal immigrants are now having "anchor babies" in the United States that have caused the nation to have doubts about this amendment. Everyone is entitled to their own opinion on how this problem should end, but it must be resolved.
Good? Or no? 
Writeacher
Which ONE SENTENCE is your thesis?
If you don't have a thesis yet, why are you wasting time writing an introduction to a paper you haven't written yet?
Please just tell us what you think your thesis statement is  even if you think it's in rough draft form. 
Writeacher
Caution:
"Illegal immigrants are now having "anchor babies" in the United States that have caused the nation to have doubts about this amendment."
This cannot be your thesis statement as it is because your opinion, your stance, your position is not included. 
Melissa
The thesis can only be in one place, which is the ending of the introduction.
My thesis: "Everyone is entitled to their own opinion on how this problem should end, but it must be resolved."
This "Illegal immigrants are now having "anchor babies" in the United States that have caused the nation to have doubts about this amendment." is not my thesis. its just like background info. 
Writeacher
"Everyone is entitled to their own opinion on how this problem should end, but it must be resolved."
That's not a thesis statement. No one would disagree with you about this. It's a statement, not a thesis.
I gave you a link above to a marvelous webpage to teach you about thesis statements. Did you read it? Did you compare your sentence with the ones in there ... and their revisions?
Try again. 
Melissa
I looked over it, but for some reason it didn't really help me.

Ms. Sue
You should state your solution in your thesis. The logical solution is a Constitutional Amendment. Are you advocating an Amendment?

Melissa
No...? I don't think so. I just want to make a point about how it's wrong to take the rights of a newborn baby because their parents sacrificed themselves to cross the border, and have their child be born in America, so it's easier for their child to have a 'good' life here.

Ms. Sue
How about something like this for a thesis statement?
U.S.born children of illegal immigrants have a Constitutional right to citizenship.
Actually, this isn't controversial, but fact. But given the mood in this country, I'd accept this as a legitimate thesis statement.
Please check back here for other opinions. 
Melissa
I really like that as a thesis statement.
Thank you so much! (: 
Ms. Sue
You're very welcome.
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