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I really need your help to revise a paragraph on Asian cheetahs. I'll post a part each time.

1) The Asian cheetah, once common in India and valued by aristocrats for its ability to catch deer (antelopes), is on the point of dying out around the world.
2) It is thought that the last Indian cheetahs had been shot in 1947. Although a few sub-species survive in a desert region in Iran, this country has refused to send cheetahs to India. However, the Indian Government intends to reintroduce cheetahs by importing them from Africa.
3) Like (similarly??) to their Asiatic counterparts (cousins?), the African cheetahs live in dry regions. However, India’s record for cat conservation is not (necessarily) squeaky clean (faultless).
4) For example, the number of tigers, another protected species, have shrunk considerably from a century ago because of under-paid, ill-equipped, and under-trained forest rangers (since they were left at the mercy of under-paid ….) who regularly advertise tiger skins for sale by underground means. (I need to rephrase the last relative clause).

asked by Henry2
  1. 1. If you decide to use "antelope" in place of "deer," be sure you DON'T add an -s. This is one of those plurals that doesn't have an -s ending. Others are these: deer, fish, elk, caribou...
    http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/plurals.htm
    Check out the irregular plural nouns.

    3. Use ONE of these -- but not a combination!
    Like their Asian counterparts, ...
    Similar to their ...
    Similarly, ...

    4. Subj-verb agreement: ... the number of tigers ... has shrunk ...

    ... who regularly sell tiger hides on the black market.

    posted by Writeacher

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