The child held on to his mother as the train went by the platform.

Question

The child held on to his mother as the train went by the platform.

Revise the sentence by making the underlined words more precise, adding at least one adjective or adverb, and adding at least one sensory detail.

make it short and like a 14 year old would type it

Answer 1

The child held on to his mother as the train went by the platform.

The young boy clutched tightly onto his mother as the loud train roared past the crowded platform.