In this discussion, you will post an excerpt from your rough draft that you feel is a trouble spot. Along with the excerpt, post some questions that you would like your classmates to address
Excerpt:
"As she walked through the darkened alley, the hairs on the back of her neck stood on end. She couldn't shake the feeling of being followed, the unease creeping into her every step. She quickened her pace, heart hammering in her chest as she tried to navigate the unfamiliar streets. Suddenly, a figure emerged from the shadows, causing her to gasp in fear. It was a tall, imposing man with piercing eyes and a sinister grin on his face. She froze in terror, unsure of what to do next."
Questions for classmates:
1. Does the pacing in this scene feel too rushed or too slow?
2. Are the descriptions of the setting and the character's emotions clear enough for you to picture the scene?
3. Do you feel invested in the character's plight and want to know more about what happens next?
4. Is the reveal of the mysterious figure effective in creating tension and suspense?
5. Any suggestions on how to improve the overall tension and atmosphere in this scene?