Patty and Joel wanted their parents to take them to the fair, so they cleaned their rooms and did all their chores first thing on Saturday morning so they could go that afternoon.
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Because Patty and Joel wanted their parents to take them to the fair, they cleaned their rooms and did all their chores first thing on Saturday morning to be ready to go in the afternoon.
Patty and Joel wanted their parents to take them to the fair. They cleaned their rooms. They did all their chores first thing on Saturday morning. They were ready to go in the afternoon.
To the fair Patty and Joel wanted to go with their parents. First thing Saturday morning, they cleaned their rooms. In the afternoon, they could go.