Read the student paragraph about a theme presented in “Raymond's Run.”
One theme in this story is “Treat others the way you would like for them to treat you.” Squeaky feels that adults should give kids the same respect that they expect from them. When Mr. Pearson calls Squeaky by her nickname, she thinks, “. . . he’s got no right to call me Squeaky, if I can’t call him Beanstalk.”
According to the PIE structure for writing about theme, what is missing from this paragraph that should be present?
a summary of the story
a theme
text evidence
an explanation of evidence
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Looking at the PIE structure for writing about a theme, there are a few elements missing from this paragraph that should be present.
1. Summary of the story: The paragraph does not provide a summary of the story "Raymond's Run." This is important because it provides context and background information for the reader.
2. Theme: The paragraph does mention one theme, which is "Treat others the way you would like for them to treat you." So, it does include a theme.
3. Text evidence: The paragraph includes some text evidence when mentioning Squeaky's thoughts about Mr. Pearson calling her by her nickname. However, more specific examples or quotes from the story could be included to strengthen the evidence.
4. Explanation of evidence: The paragraph does not include an explanation of the evidence provided. This is important because it helps to analyze and interpret how the evidence supports the theme and provides deeper understanding.
To improve the paragraph based on the PIE structure, it should include a summary of the story, specific text evidence with quotes, and a clear explanation of how the evidence supports the theme.
To improve the paragraph using the PIE structure for writing about theme, the missing component is a summary of the story. The paragraph correctly includes the theme, text evidence, and an explanation of the evidence. However, it lacks a summary that provides an overview of the main events and characters in the story "Raymond's Run."
To include a summary of the story, the paragraph could be revised as follows:
"One theme in the story 'Raymond's Run' is 'Treat others the way you would like for them to treat you.' The story follows the protagonist, Squeaky, a talented runner with a strong sense of fairness. Squeaky believes that children deserve the same respect from adults that they expect in return. For instance, when Mr. Pearson calls Squeaky by her nickname, she becomes upset, thinking, '... he's got no right to call me Squeaky if I can't call him Beanstalk.' This moment highlights Squeaky's belief that everyone should be treated with respect, mirroring the principle 'treat others the way you would like for them to treat you.' Therefore, Squeaky's actions and thoughts throughout the story reflect the theme of treating others with fairness and equality."
Including the summarized overview at the beginning helps contextualize the theme, providing a better understanding of how the evidence supports the theme of treating others fairly.