I have to write a essay and I don't know how to lengthen the rough draft could someone please give me tips?
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Comparison-and-Contrast Essay
The Story-Teller and The Drummer Boy of Shiloh
Comparison and Contrast means to tell the differences and similarities between two things. I have been told to compare and contrast two of the stories i’ve read, So i’ve chosen The Story-Teller and The Drummer Boy of Shiloh.
The Drummer Boy of Shiloh is about a child, who is in fear of the battle he has to participate in because he has no weapon to defend himself from the gun fires of war. The Story-Teller is about a bachelor who has to deal with a aunt who can’t get her children to be quiet, so the bachelor tells the children a story which occupies them until the train ride is over.
They are both obviously written by different people. The Drummer Boy of Shiloh was written by Ray Bradbury and The Story-Teller is written by Saki. Both stories are very well written and I personally like these stories. They both relate to the “Big Question” can all conflicts be resolved. They have the basics; A main character, a setting, turning point, etc..
They have some kind of conflict in them. In the Story-Teller; The bachelor has a conflict with the Aunt who can’t get her children to quiet down, and in the Drummer Boy of Shiloh; Joby is in a conflict with fear itself as the battle of Shiloh draws near.
Both stories have different characters, settings, scenes, plots, etc. Both stories are also different in the way they show the “Big Question”, since their plots are different.
The Story-Teller is a fiction and the Drummer boy of Shiloh is a non-fiction. The Drummer Boy of Shiloh is based off of John Clem; Which is the story of a young drummer boy in the Civil war who was famous for being the youngest non-commissioned officer in army history. He’s also known for his bravery on the battlefield.
In conclusion, Both are different and alike in their own unique ways, and are well-written stories.

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  1. Also here's the rubric, If someone could tell me if mine meets the requirements that would be very helpful~.

    The main idea or purpose is clearly stated. The response is fully relevant. The response strongly supports the main idea or purpose.
    There is a clear and effective organizational structure. The introduction and conclusion are effective. Ideas are organized logically.
    There is a clear, natural voice that fully engages the reader.
    The vocabulary is clearly appropriate for the audience and purpose. Words are used effectively. Writing is rich with a variety of academic and domain-specific words.
    Sentence structure is varied. Sentences flow smoothly. A variety of transitions is used.

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