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I wrote this poem but i'm not sure if it's any good...PLZ comment

Especially writeacher. :-)

Your eyes burn with rage
Like the ball of fire in the sky
Time passes by, and I never got to say goodbye
Like an Eagle in The sky
You soar away from Home.
Never to return...
run like a thief in the night

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    Either remove all punctuation or punctuate all complete sentences correctly.

    Then we'll see.

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    Great poem !

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    Like the ball of fire in the sky
    Time passes by and I never got to say goodbye
    Like an Eagle in The sky
    You soar away from Home
    Never to return
    run like a thief in the night

    this is being graded along with this poem (it's pretty long):

    When nothing else remains, I want to know if you’ll stand by my side. If you’ll be the light of my path when the sun shuts down. I want to know if you’ll mend my soul and patch up my bleeding heart; even if it’s beyond all repair.

    When nothing else remains, the clouds cease and the world becomes barren, I want to know if you’ll mouth my name, and tell me everything’s alright.

    Give me a sign. We should be able to fly. I want to know if we can touch the sky. I want to know if I can be with you, dream with you… without having to talk to you.

    When nothing else remains, buildings tumble and fall, as smoke fills the air our love should conquer all.

    Give me a sign that will show me if you care. All the pain and subtle ecstasy, I want to know if you’ll be able to bare.

    Give me a sign and let our eyes do the talking. I wan to know if you’ll hold me strong in your arms. You can sustain our love.

    When nothing else remains, I want to know if you’ll be my Romeo; holding hands hallucinating. Together we dream of a teeming world where only love survives.

    Give me a sign that shows me you care. Our love is like a song. I want to know if our melody will play on and on.

    When nothing else remains, it shouldn’t matter if you’re scared. That’s how close we should be. Together we’ll travel to the end of the sea … all I want is us.

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    i know it's long... don't be scared to read and comment guys. i need it

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