English

posted by .

Can anyone check this text and if there are any mistakes, fix it?

I am writing to complain about the advertisement for your new game. I just played the game and then i realised that the advertisement is misleading.

You say there are big cash prizes and averyone can win it. In fact there is only one prize, so only one person can win it. You also say that the game is cheap, but funte 5 for a game is expensive, because not many people can afford it.

  • English -

    I am writing to complain about the advertisement for your new game.<~~What is the name of this game? I just played the game<~~comma needed and then i<~~?? realised that the advertisement is misleading.

    You say there are big cash prizes and averyone<~~?? can win it<~~What is "it"?. In fact<~~comma needed there is only one prize, so only one person can win it. You also say that the game is cheap, but funte 5<~~?? for a game is expensive,<~~What does "expensive" mean? How much is "expensive"? Compared to what? because not many people<~~How many are "not many"? Are you saying that everyone should be able to afford it? Isn't that unrealistic in our world? can afford it.

    Also, your letter is not complete. Read the information here to see what is missing.
    http://www.letterwritingguide.com/complaint.htm
    Then revise/rewrite and re-post.

  • English -

    you spelt everyone averyone and i don't know what funte is lol !

Respond to this Question

First Name
School Subject
Your Answer

Similar Questions

  1. Writing

    Josie wrote a newspaper advertisement about the school cafeteria's meatloaf. She wanted everyone to try it, so she explained how delicious it was and why they should eat it.Was her advertisement an example of descriptive,persuasive, …
  2. business

    In writing a advertisement for a job(mine is senior system analyst) What items should I list that must be included in the advertisement for legal purposes?
  3. Math-Fair Game question

    the game of dots is played by rolling a fair die and receiving 1$ for each dot showing on the top face of the die. What cost should be set for each roll if the game is to be considered a fair game?
  4. hum 205

    You are in charge of marketing and advertisement at your local art museum. Next month, the museum will be hosting an exhibition on the social role of the arts in early Chinese and Japanese civilizations. ยท Create a 2-page, informative …
  5. english

    Could someone check my work? Ms. Sue thank you for checking for me!! A commercial critizing oil drilling shows images of oil-soaked birds and sea otters that are suffering. This commercial is using pathos (answer) ethos logos A commercial
  6. Principle of Marketing

    Requirement 3: Television or Radio Advertisement (20 Points) For this requirement, each team will create a storyboard or script for a television or radio advertisement. An average radio or television ad is about 30 seconds, so have …
  7. English

    Does this count as an Emotional Words advertisement?
  8. english

    What are the values (negative) being taught in this advertisement?
  9. English

    What are the values (negative) being taught in this advertisement?
  10. maths

    In 2013 all the 180, student of a class played either chess polo or tennis of two out of there 3 game or all the 3 game 84 of them played chess 87 played polo and 87 played tenins 39 pay led only polo and 16 played both chess and tenins …

More Similar Questions