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Need help with writing an essay. My essay will be about giving advices to high school students on how to be a successful.

I have to create arguements for it and I don't know how. At first I want to give a difinition of the word "Successful".Then write about being unsuccessful and successful (Comparing). Then after write Thesis. Is this good?

Please check my thesis for my essay. Thank you and I appreciate your help!

There are many high school students who are unccessful in their school performances due to not getting much adivce of how to better their learning skills.

  1. Writeacher

    "There are many high school students who are unccessful in their school performances due to not getting much adivce of how to better their learning skills."

    This is not a thesis statement. It is factual, but YOUR OPINION about this topic is not stated.

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    Your thesis statement must include factual information plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)

    http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
    This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.

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