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Hi, can someone please revise my essay. I'd really appriciate any sugestions.

There has been an ongoing controversy in Canada on whether the drinking age should be lowered to eighteen like most of the world (Russia, Argentina, Hong Kong, etc.) or if it should stay at nineteen. The government of Ontario should lower drinking age to eighteen. Province like Quebec, Alberta, New Brunswick already changed their legal drinking age. Moreover, Ontario is just across the border from Quebec. Isn’t it strange that an eighteen year old can cross the border from Ottawa to Quebec and drink legally? Underage drinking has been a major controversial issue for years, yet why is it not under control? Teenagers are continuing to buy alcohol with fake identification cards, drink, get into bars, and drink illegally. There are a lot of factors that come together to why the drinking age should be lowered to eighteen; the most obvious reason is too many people are drinking before they are eighteen. Liquor stores, bars, and clubs all want to make money and if they can get away with selling to underage teens then they will.

By allowing drinking at a younger age in Europe, teenagers learn at home the responsibilities that come with drinking. Therefore, when a minor begins drinking at home, in a controlled environment, not in a forbidden atmosphere, society receives a much more accountable person. On other hand, teenagers have always rebelled; that will not change, but drinking is now a preferred rebellion without regards to the responsibilities that come with it since they must drink in secrecy. While it is illegal to purchase alcohol before age nineteen, most places have hidden exceptions to the law allowing consumption at a younger age. Young adults, who can fight for their country, vote, marry, and sign legal documents, should have the right to purchase, posses, and consume alcohol.

The Prohibition Act was put into effect in the 1920’s. History has seen how well this has worked. If people want alcohol they will get alcohol. There is no way around this fact. My point is that from biblical times forbidden fruit always tastes sweeter.
I believe that if we say that you cannot drink there will be more drinking. When people say that we are only 18 and there fore we should not drink, what basis they have for that. We are old enough to do everything else except that one thing, obviously we can think far enough to realize what could happen to us before we pick up the bottle. Not all 18 year olds are blind. We can see the newspaper, the television, the road. We see the effects of drinking. Many of the right-wingers believe that since we are only 18 that we are not smart enough to get the picture.
The real problem the government needs to focus on is how we can stop drinking and driving. They say they are stopping it because the drinking age is nineteen. That’s wrong. We should stop putting so much emphasis on how much drinking is going on and put more emphasis on the many people that do not drink. Positive re-enforcements any one; what happened to those? Yes, you will still go to jail if you drive under the influence. Lowering the drinking age to 18 will not change this fact. It is a know fact that there are bad and good people out there. There are many people in jail for murder and rape, but there are also many people that do not murder and rape other people. Many people do drink and drive but there are also many people who are content with sleeping it off at the party they were at. Lowering the drinking age will in my eyes reduce the amount of drinking and driving. There are good and bad people out there. There will be people out there that are stupid enough to drink and drive. There always will be. We are old enough to fight for our country. That is my main point. As I stated earlier; if we are old enough to die for our country we should be allowed to pick up a beer. We are smart enough to know better that drinking and driving is dangerous.

In conclusion, anticipating the milestone of turning nineteen so that one can finally drink legally is unfair. By lowering the drinking age in the Canada, today’s youth would receive an improved education about drinking responsibly. By lowering a drinking age in Canada, today’s youth would receive an improved education about drinking responsibly. Schools should have classes that stress the importance of being a responsible person, under influence of alcohol. In addition, a lower drinking age would reduce the dangerous activity of binge drinking in which underage drinkers primarily engage. As I stated many times before, an eighteen year old is allowed to sign legal papers, get married, and die for his/her country. However, he/she cannot legally drink. Ask yourselves, it this fair?

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    Some commentary about phrasing ...

    This -- lowered to eighteen like most of the world -- should be this: lowered to eighteen as in most of the world

    This -- My point is that from biblical times forbidden fruit always tastes sweeter -- needs explanation. What if someone who reads the paper hasn't read the Bible and has no idea what you're referring to?

    Check on comma rules, too:

    Overall, it's good. Just needs polish.

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    too layed back...using words like "stupid" dominishes the value of your essay

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