Same-sex marriage should be legalized because it is uncivilized to deny homosexuals their civil rights. The Constitution guarantees everyone equal rights and opportunities, however, gays are denied both in terms of marriage.

is this better? I have support in other paragraphs

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  1. Yes, this is much better. :-)

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    posted by Ms. Sue
  2. Be sure to put a semicolon (;) after "opportunities" not a comma. Otherwise, it's a run-on.

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