Thesis is -Taking daughters to see their mothers in jail should be a program of its own.-
I don't know if my topic sentence are correct:
Negative affect on the amount of extra responsibility the girl scouts take on.
Girl scouts has an age limit for not all girls can participate
The social worker can focus better on just helping the girls and mothers with there relationship
Not all the girls in the troop may be mature enough to take on the jail life of their mother.
These all seem very disjointed and unrelated. What do Girl Scouts have to do with kids visiting their moms in jail?
You need to make the connection very clear. The last thing you want is for your readers to guess at anything. They would probably stop reading if the connections among ideas are not clear.
It's about the movie troop 1500. A girl scout troop that takes girls to see their mothers in jail
Troop 1500 of Central Texas Girl Scouts is a real troop. The troop is the girls of incarcerated mothers. The purpose of the troop is to prevent the girls from going to jail eventually, as it is very probable for daughters of jailed moms to follow in their footsteps. The program is ongoing. The troop leader is a social worker dealing with the girls, and their families.
So your thesis sentence ..it is a program of its own. The purpose is to keep the girls from going to jail.
I would focus on other research other then the "movie".
It's not a program of it's own. It's with the girl scouts their for only girls in girl scouts can do that nd it should be able that any child be able to participate
hey i thank that's a great idea
(my mothers in jail :( )
It seems like you are trying to come up with topic sentences to support your thesis, which states that taking daughters to see their mothers in jail should be a program of its own. While your sentences touch on relevant points, they may require some revision for clarity and to better align with your overall argument. Here are some suggestions for improved topic sentences:
1. The negative impact of not addressing the additional responsibilities that may arise for the Girl Scouts when their mothers are in jail emphasizes the need for a dedicated program.
- This topic sentence highlights the potential negative consequences that the Girl Scouts may face due to their mothers being in jail and explains why a specific program is needed to address this issue.
2. The age limitations imposed by the Girl Scouts organization may prevent some girls from participating in activities related to visiting their incarcerated mothers, underscoring the necessity for a separate program.
- This topic sentence emphasizes that the current age restrictions within the Girl Scouts can limit or exclude certain members from participating in important activities related to visiting their mothers in jail. It supports the idea that a separate program is necessary to meet the needs of these girls.
3. A program dedicated solely to assisting the girls and their incarcerated mothers in developing and maintaining their relationship would allow social workers to provide more focused and effective support.
- This topic sentence highlights how creating a separate program could enable social workers to prioritize the needs of the girls and incarcerated mothers, allowing them to provide better assistance in fostering and sustaining their relationship.
4. Considering the potential emotional impact and unique challenges of experiencing jail life through their mothers, it is important to ensure that the program is tailored to the maturity levels of all girls involved.
- This topic sentence acknowledges the emotional toll and challenges that girls may face when being exposed to the reality of jail life through their mothers. It suggests that a separate program should take into account the maturity levels of all participants to ensure their well-being.
Remember, topic sentences serve as a concise preview of the main idea of each paragraph and should effectively support and develop your thesis statement.