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Dreams Are Taken Away
It was a tough day on September 30, 2002 with a crowd of high school students carrying posters and signs marching in the middle of the street. None of them were happy at all. “Governor Davis is throwing away our future with his unfair High School Exit Exam,” said Rosa De Leon, a student from Overfelt High School in San Jose, CA. In the article “Don’t Trash Our Futures” by CFJ Student Leaders, the High School Exit Exam is a test that throws the students’ dreams away. It only allows the wealthy and the kids who spoke English as their first language to have a dream. The High School Exit Exam is an unfair test toward students who speak English as their second language.
Non native speakers learning a different language are at a disadvantage and have a harder time passing the exam. ESL students are struggling with the English portion because of their low reading and writing skills. Many of them are new to the country and they cannot learn how to read or write in a month. The High School Exit Exam is an unfair test for ESL students because foreign students cannot be expected to learn English in very little time.
“Seventeen and 18-year-olds should not just be handed diplomas. Diplomas are earned with hard work; they should not be awarded just for showing up to class.” said Jack O’ Connell, California State Superintended. ESL students are more dedicated to their education. They do the same or more work and should be rewarded for their effort. Many American students take education as granted but the ESL students do not. Taking time to come to class is important not just because of perfect attendance, but important of one’s education. Students need their diplomas to get a job. In the country where they came from, only the wealthy can go to school and the poor has to work out on the field or in the factory. In the United States, everyone has the right to go to school whether he or she is rich or poor. They valued their education because it is important. Personally, I went through the same experience, because I am an ESL student myself. I came from an unhealthy family. My parents had work out in the field to earn money for my education. I failed the English portion of the High School Exit Exam with 345 points. I thought I was because I failed the test, however I passed it the second time.
In the article “CHASEE At A Glance,” stated that “Other option are available to these students, including attending adult school or a community college to obtain a diploma or taking the General Educational Development test to receive a GED.” Some ESL students are not able to continue education beyond high school for financial reasons. In California, the law says that if a students turn 18 years old, he or she is considered as an adult and must go work to support him or herself. They cannot go work at a place that pays well because they do not have a diploma. If they use their money to pay for their education, then they will not have any money left to support themselves.
President Bush passed the No Child Left Behind Act in 2002. This was to help students who were struggling in school. If this Act was passed, then why should foreign students who are new to the country be left behind, while others who are already in the country have the right to move forward. Everyone has a right in this country to graduate from High School as long as he or she meets the A-G requirement. The University is not going to look at the test for admission, they will just look at the grade which is what matter the most.
The Exit Exam is not only a test that stops students from not receiving a diploma, but it also is an unfair test toward other backgrounds. Students who are new to the country cannot score as high as the students who already knows English. There is no chances for them to pass the test because they have not build up their vocabulary words or know how to write an essay. The High School Exit Exam has caused the students to drop out of high school because other people are not satisfied with what they got.

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  1. The title looks just fine. Where is the essay?

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  2. If you are trying to copy and paste, it's apparently not working. You will no doubt have to type it all in if copy/paste doesn't work.

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  3. Dreams Are Taken Away
    It was a tough day on September 30, 2002 with a crowd of high school students carrying posters and signs marching in the middle of the street. None of them were happy at all. "Governor Davis is throwing away our future with his unfair High School Exit Exam," said Rosa De Leon, a student from Overfelt High School in San Jose, CA. In the article "Don't Trash Our Futures" by CFJ Students Leaders, the High School Exit Exam is a test that throws the students' dreams away. It only allows the waelthy and the kids who spoke English as their first language to have a dream. The High School Exit Exam is an unfair test toward students who spesk English as their second language.
    Non native speakers learning a different language are at a disadvantage and have a harder time passing the exam. ESL students are struggling with the English portion because of their low reading and writing skills. Many of them are new to the country and they cannot learn how to read or write in a month. The High School Exit Exam is an unfair test for ESL students because foreign students cannot be expected to learn English in a very little time.

    "Seventeen and 18-year-olds should not just be handed diplomas. Diplomas are earned with hard work; they should not be awarded just for showing up to class." said Jack O' Connell, California State Superintended. ESL students are more dedicated to their education. They do the same or more works and should be rewarded for their effort. Many American students take education as granted, but the ESL students do not. Taking time to come to class is important not just because of perfect attendance, but important of one's education. Students need their diplomas to get a job. In the country where they came from, only the wealthy can go to school and the poor has to work out on the feild or in the factory. In the United States, everyone has the right to go to school whether he or she is rich or poor. They value their education because it is important. Personally, I went through the same experience, because I am an ESL student myself. I came from a an unwealthy family. My parents had to work out on the feild to earn money for my education. I failed the English portion of the High School Exit Exam with 345 points. I thought I was because I failed the test, however I passed it the second time.
    In the article "CHASEE AT A Glance," stated that "Other option are available to these students, including attending adult school or a community college to obtain a diploma or taking the General Education Development test to receive a GED." Some ESL students are not able to continue education beyond high school for financial readons. In California, the law says that if a students turn 18 years old, he or she is considered as an adult and must go work to support him or herself. They cannot go work at a place that pays well because they do not have a diploma. If they use their money to pay for their education, then they will not have any money left to support themselves.
    President Bush passed the No Child Left Behind Act in 2002. This Act was to help students who were struggling in school. If this Act was passed, then why should foreign students who are new to the country be left behind, while others who are already in the country have the right to move forward. Everyone has a right in this country to graduate from High School as long as he or she meets the A-G requirement. The University is not going to look at the test for admissio, they will just look at the grade which is what matter the most.
    The Exit Exam is not only a test that stops students from not recieving a diploma, but it also is an unfair test toward other backgrounds. Students who are new to the country cannot score as high the students who already knows English. There is no chances for them to pass the test because they have not build up their vocabulary words or know how to write an essay. The High School Exit Exam has caused the students to drop out of high school because other people are not satisfied with what they got.

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  4. it was horrible i am a fifth grade teacher

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