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Can you please tell if the word choice is correct and how I can improve it?
In particular, I'd like you to consider the words in parentheses, too

1) I spent the first days of my Christmas holidays doing homework and studying
2) During the first weekend of my holidays, I went to the seaside with my parents. The weather was fine, and we enjoyed going for walks and buying the last Christmas presents.
3) On Christmas Eve, I first went to the midnight mass, and then I had some hot chocolate with my friends. After that, I went back home and I opened (I unwrapped) my Christmas presents. I was surprised (pleased?) to receive a pair of sunglasses and a pair of jeans
4) I spent the rest of my holidays going to pubs with my friends for a drink.
5) I liked (enjoyed) going to pubs with my friends for a beer (drink), or spending some time with them at home.
5) On 7 January I returned to school and I was a bit unhappy because I had to get up early again. I was also content (?) though, because I had spent a lot of time with my family and friends.
6)On the first day of holiday, (or of my holidays, and not on my first holiday's day?) On Christmas day, I had a big (?) lunch with my family and then we opened the presents under the Christmas tree. I spent the rest of my holidays going shopping in different shopping malls in my area.
7) On the first days of January I finished my homework (and not I did the last part of my homework)
8) I went to a party. I was very satisfied (excited? It was a nice experience for me) because I had the opportunity to meet new people (or to get to know) and make new friends
9) I stayed there for three days OR I spent three days there.
10 ) I spent the rest of my holidays finishing (?) my homework and studying (or preparing?) for a test.

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asked by Franco
  1. 6. "first day of holiday," = either "first day of my holiday" or plural as you have in parentheses.

    7. (and not I did the last part of my homework) = bad word order = and I did not do the last part of my homework.

    Everything else is fine, whether you use what you wrote first or what you added in parentheses.

    Sra

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