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I told them how surprised and excited I was to have my painting selected, especially since I’d felt so incompetent at the beginning and I knew the competition was so ruthless.
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“It was such a big surprise.” I told them. “I’m excited that my painting was selected!” I had felt so incompetent at the beginning, feeling unqualified next to such ruthless competition.
I told them truthfully that I was surprised to be chosen. The competition was ruthless, so very fierce. I felt so incompetent at the beginning. It’s really exciting to have my painting selected.
“I’m in!” I exclaimed, voice cracking with emotion. “My painting was selected and I might faint!” I felt so incompetent at the beginning competing against such ruthless competition.
“Did you hear?” I asked them. “My painting was selected!” They cheered loudly, especially given that the competition was so ruthless. I had felt so incompetent at the beginning.