Can you tell me if this is a good start on my persuasive paragraph !
Sit down for a change. Take a seat at El Toro! El Toro has been serving their food since 1998. Do you know why you should visit the magnificent restaurant? Well when you go and take a seat there you will be blown away by the serves. They serve fast and always have a smile on their face. They keep things tidy and clean. They have put their own little style in it. You also have a verity of things to choose from. Like, burritos, taco, fêtes, and salads.
. . . has been serving its food . . .
. . . visit this magnificent restaurant?
4th sentence: Don't start with "Well."
I don't want to be "blown away." Find a better expression.
. . . by the servers
O.K. I quit. That's far too many errors in just four sentences. I see several more mistakes that I'm sure you can find if you proofread carefully and watch out for pronoun/antecedent agreement.
Ignoring the errors, which is difficult to do, I don't find it persuasive. I am attracted to resturants that are quiet, not trendy, have a menu variety, and properly cook the food.
I am not impressed with the age of the restaurant, the seats (although I like highback chairs), the servers need to be polite and attentive, they need not smile unless they are happy. I am wondering why the servers are keeping the table tidy and clean? Ok, that is nice. I am not certain of the focus on burritos, tacos, fajitas, and salads. I eat Mexican often, but not that stuff.
Now my point: Just who are you trying to persuade? If it is the college crowd, you didn't mention beer. If it is family, you didn't mention at all kid friendly (kids menu). If it is the office lunch crowd, you did mention fast, but avoid "healthy". So who were you trying to persuade? That is the essence of persuasive writing, you are writing to an audience: overcome their fears, reluctance, and then cater to their ego.
Have fun.
Based on the provided paragraph, here's an evaluation of your persuasive paragraph:
Your start to the persuasive paragraph is attention-grabbing. The phrase "Sit down for a change" immediately captivates the reader's attention.
However, there are a few improvements you can make to enhance your paragraph:
1. Clarify the purpose: Make it clear from the start that you are persuading people to visit El Toro restaurant. This can be done by including a clear topic sentence indicating that you will be discussing the reasons why people should visit the restaurant.
2. Develop your points: Instead of simply stating that the restaurant has been serving food since 1998, expand on the quality of their food or their reputation in the community. Provide specific examples or details to support your claims about the services they offer, such as exceptional customer service, fast and friendly staff, and cleanliness.
3. Organization: Consider dividing your paragraph into separate sentences or paragraphs to present your ideas more clearly. Each point you make, such as the quality of the service, tidiness, or variety of menu options, should be discussed in its own paragraph. This will make it easier for the reader to follow and understand your argument.
4. Spelling and grammar: Make sure to proofread your paragraph to correct any spelling or grammatical errors, such as "serves" instead of "service" and "verity" instead of "variety."
Final revised paragraph:
Looking for a remarkable dining experience? Look no further than El Toro! Established in 1998, El Toro has built a solid reputation, drawing customers in with their exceptional service and delectable cuisine. The moment you step through their doors, you'll be greeted with warm smiles and efficient service. The restaurant maintains a spotless environment, ensuring your comfort from the moment you sit down. Additionally, El Toro adds its own unique touch, creating an ambiance that sets it apart from other dining establishments. With an extensive menu offering mouthwatering options like burritos, tacos, fajitas, and salads, there's something to satisfy every taste. Choose El Toro and prepare to embark on a culinary journey like no other.