Today seemed like the perfect day, until...
Introduction (1 paragraph; Needs to be at least 5 sentences long)
Does the introduction engage the reader?
Does it introduce the narrator or main characters?
Does it set the context for the story, such as describing the setting or introducing a conflict?
Today seemed like the perfect day. The sun was shining, birds were chirping, and a gentle breeze rustled through the trees. I had plans to meet up with my best friend for a picnic in the park, and nothing could dampen my spirits. However, as I arrived at the park and scanned the crowd for my friend, a sinking feeling of dread started to creep in. My phone buzzed in my pocket, and as I read the message, my heart dropped. Today was not going to be perfect after all. It seemed like my perfect day was about to take a turn for the worse.
Body Paragraphs (Need to have 3 paragraphs, with at least 5 sentences in each paragraph)
Does the sequence of events unfold naturally and logically?
Is dialogue used at the right times to develop the characters and move the story forward?
Is description used, including sensory language and descriptive details, to help develop the experiences, events, and characters?
Is the pacing effective for the story? Does the story move along?
Do I have dialogue and conversation between the characters? (You need to include a conversation at least 2 times, using quotation marks!)
As I read the message from my friend, my heart sank. "I'm so sorry, something came up last minute and I won't be able to make it to the picnic today," it read. Disappointment washed over me as I realized my plans for the day had just been dashed. I scanned the park once more, hoping to see a familiar face or perhaps a backup plan, but there was no one else I could call to join me. It was just me, alone in the park on what was supposed to be a perfect day.
Feeling dejected, I slowly unpacked the picnic basket I had prepared, taking out all the delicious goodies I had brought. As I nibbled on a sandwich, I couldn't shake the feeling of loneliness that permeated the air around me. The laughter of families and friends enjoying their time together only served to remind me of my own solitude. I tried to distract myself by watching the playful antics of the children nearby, but it only made me feel more isolated.
As the sun started to set and the park began to empty out, I gathered up my belongings and started to make my way home. Just as I was about to leave, a voice called out to me. "Hey, are you leaving already?" I turned to see a friendly face, a stranger who had noticed my solitude and reached out to offer some company. We struck up a conversation, and as we walked out of the park together, I realized that sometimes unexpected events can lead to new connections and friendships. The day may not have turned out as I had planned, but it had certainly taken a turn for the better.
add an extra sentence to these 2 paragraphs
As I read the message from my friend, my heart sank. "I'm so sorry, something came up last minute and I won't be able to make it to the picnic today," it read. Disappointment washed over me as I realized my plans for the day had just been dashed. I scanned the park once more, hoping to see a familiar face or perhaps a backup plan, but there was no one else I could call to join me. It was just me, alone in the park on what was supposed to be a perfect day.
Feeling dejected, I slowly unpacked the picnic basket I had prepared, taking out all the delicious goodies I had brought. As I nibbled on a sandwich, I couldn't shake the feeling of loneliness that permeated the air around me. The laughter of families and friends enjoying their time together only served to remind me of my own solitude. I tried to distract myself by watching the playful antics of the children nearby, but it only made me feel more isolated.
As the sun started to set and the park began to empty out, I gathered up my belongings and started to make my way home. Just as I was about to leave, a voice called out to me. "Hey, are you leaving already?" I turned to see a friendly face, a stranger who had noticed my solitude and reached out to offer some company. We struck up a conversation, and as we walked out of the park together, I realized that sometimes unexpected events can lead to new connections and friendships. The day may not have turned out as I had planned, but it had certainly taken a turn for the better. The sunset painted the sky in hues of orange and pink, casting a warm glow over our newfound friendship.
add an extra sentence to these 2 paragraphs
As I read the message from my friend, my heart sank. "I'm so sorry, something came up last minute and I won't be able to make it to the picnic today," it read. Disappointment washed over me as I realized my plans for the day had just been dashed. I scanned the park once more, hoping to see a familiar face or perhaps a backup plan, but there was no one else I could call to join me. It was just me, alone in the park on what was supposed to be a perfect day.
Feeling dejected, I slowly unpacked the picnic basket I had prepared, taking out all the delicious goodies I had brought. As I nibbled on a sandwich, I couldn't shake the feeling of loneliness that permeated the air around me. The laughter of families and friends enjoying their time together only served to remind me of my own solitude. I tried to distract myself by watching the playful antics of the children nearby, but it only made me feel more isolated.
As the sun started to set and the park began to empty out, I gathered up my belongings and started to make my way home. Just as I was about to leave, a voice called out to me. "Hey, are you leaving already?" I turned to see a friendly face, a stranger who had noticed my solitude and reached out to offer some company. We struck up a conversation, and as we walked out of the park together, I realized that sometimes unexpected events can lead to new connections and friendships. The day may not have turned out as I had planned, but it had certainly taken a turn for the better. The sunset painted the sky in hues of orange and pink, casting a warm glow over our newfound friendship. As we exchanged contact information, I couldn't help but feel grateful for the chance encounter that had brightened my day.
i'm not telling you to do that, i'm telling you to add an extra sentence to the paragraph #1 and #2
I apologize for the confusion. Here are the additional sentences added to each of the paragraphs:
As I read the message from my friend, my heart sank. "I'm so sorry, something came up last minute and I won't be able to make it to the picnic today," it read. Disappointment washed over me as I realized my plans for the day had just been dashed. I scanned the park once more, hoping to see a familiar face or perhaps a backup plan, but there was no one else I could call to join me. It was just me, alone in the park on what was supposed to be a perfect day. Sitting on the grass, I watched as a group of friends laughed and enjoyed each other's company, their happiness highlighting my own sense of solitude.
Feeling dejected, I slowly unpacked the picnic basket I had prepared, taking out all the delicious goodies I had brought. As I nibbled on a sandwich, I couldn't shake the feeling of loneliness that permeated the air around me. The laughter of families and friends enjoying their time together only served to remind me of my own solitude. I tried to distract myself by watching the playful antics of the children nearby, but it only made me feel more isolated. The sound of a nearby fountain provided a tranquil backdrop to my melancholic thoughts.
Conclusion (1 paragraph; Needs to be at least 5 sentences long)
Does the conclusion follow from and reflect on the narrated experiences?
Does the resolution solve the conflict that is central to the plot and wrap up the plot without leaving any loose ends?
Does the conclusion show how a character has changed/grown?
Did the conclusion clarify the theme or message of the story?
Did the conclusion reflect on the meaning of the events and experiences?