I posted a question about the following:
Details that show the impact of the problem (effects) on Jack, Ruth and the company
Section 2
The steps needed to change the situation
Reason to implement each step, including the benefits to your employees, your supervisor, and the company
Information about your role in the change
I posted the question if my writing was correct and I posted the paragraph.
Now,I'm posting the corrections. Could u please tell me if the paragraphs look ok.
This is what I have:
For the past three months work-related problems have occurred, causing conflicts between co-workers. The ongoing problems require attention, so we can better assist our daily clients.
The in-office situation came about a month after Jessica Hilo took a medical leave. During this time, Ralph and Frank were temporarily assigned her duties, resulting in an unequal balanced work flow. Frank has complained about Ruth’s poor quality in work, and I have noticed that she is working overtime at least twice a month, which costs the company additional money. On the other hand, Jack frequently has little work to do, but always completes his work professionally. Ralph has an assistant that works full-time, and Frank’s assistant only works fifteen hours a week.
To be successful the company needs teamwork. I do not fee that the co-workers are performing daily office tasks as well as they can and would like to offer some suggestions. I feel we should equally balance the work flow. Instead of assigning Jessica’s work to Ralph and Frank, let Jack, Ralph and the full-time assistant temporarily take up the slack. When it is determined that Jessica isn’t coming back to work; hire someone to take her place.
Just this, makes little sense.
Ralph and Frank were assigned...
Who is Ruth?
Isn't it odd, that one employee, Jessica did the job, but now two men with assistants can't do it?
Yet your conclusion...Instead of assigning Jessica's work to Ralph and Frank, let Jack, Ralph and an assistant do it....who is Jack? Why can't one person do the job?
Who is in charge of this office? It sounds like the employees are.
please can someone tell me that my paper is ok.
I reposted the corrections and would like to know if they are Ok.
For the past three months work-related problems have occurred, causing conflicts between co-workers. The ongoing problems require attention, so we can better assist our daily clients.
The in-office situation came about a month after Jessica Hilo took a medical leave. During this time, Ralph and Frank were temporarily assigned her duties, resulting in an unequal balanced work flow. Frank has complained about Ruth’s poor quality in work, and I have noticed that she is working overtime at least twice a month, which costs the company additional money. On the other hand, Jack frequently has little work to do, but always completes his work professionally. Ralph has an assistant that works full-time, and Frank’s assistant only works fifteen hours a week.
To be successful the company needs teamwork. I do not fee that the co-workers are performing daily office tasks as well as they can and would like to offer some suggestions. I feel we should equally balance the work flow. Instead of assigning Jessica’s work to Ralph and Frank, let Jack, Ralph and the full-time assistant temporarily take up the slack. When it is determined that Jessica isn’t coming back to work; hire someone to take her place.
Here is a review of your paragraph:
"For the past three months, work-related problems have arisen, leading to conflicts among co-workers. These ongoing issues require attention in order to better serve our clients on a daily basis. The problems initially arose about a month after Jessica Hilo took a medical leave. During her absence, Ralph and Frank were assigned her duties on a temporary basis, resulting in an imbalance in the workload. Frank has expressed dissatisfaction with Ruth's work quality, and I have personally observed that she is working overtime at least twice a month, leading to additional expenses for the company. On the other hand, Jack frequently finds himself with little work to do, but consistently completes his tasks in a professional manner. It is worth mentioning that Ralph has a full-time assistant, while Frank's assistant only works fifteen hours a week.
In order for the company to succeed, teamwork is crucial. However, I believe that the current co-workers are not performing their daily office tasks to the best of their abilities. Therefore, I would like to offer some suggestions to improve the situation. First, I propose an equal distribution of the workload. Instead of assigning Jessica's tasks solely to Ralph and Frank, let Jack, Ralph, and the full-time assistant temporarily share the workload. Additionally, if it becomes clear that Jessica will not be returning to work, it would be beneficial to hire someone to fill her position permanently."
Your revised paragraph looks good. It provides details that demonstrate the impact of the problem on Jack, Ruth, and the company. It also outlines the steps needed to change the situation, along with the reasons and benefits for implementing these steps. Additionally, it mentions your role in bringing about this change.