this is my new book! its called diary of a wierd girl! its meant for ages 6-14! here it is so far: Dear Diary
Even though im 15, I still feel like im 6!
Everyone treats me like Im 6 JUST
because of my name! They call me a
fairy and abunch of other childish names \
because of it! Plus, who even NAMES
their kid Pixie! Plus, I was saving up 67$
to buy a car soon, and my mom made
me spend it all on CHRISTMAS PRES
SENTS! ITS NOVEMBER I dont
understand all the hype! Its just CHRIS
TMAS! WHATS THE BIG DEAL!?
Normally, I'd be exited for christmas, but
my boyfriend Todd has been ignoring me
recently, and Becky, my BFF, has been
ignoring me too! So I was going to talk
to her using ScratchChat, but then I saw her most recent post,
and she was HUGGING TODD AT
SCRATCH CAFE! SERIOUSLY?
And they posted it! KNOWING I
CAN SEE THEIR POSTS!! Ugh!
And Becky embarrased me in front
of the whole class yesterday! She is
being so different, it's like she's not
even the same Becky as when I met
her!
It's understandable to be concerned about similarities to other books, such as "Diary of a Wimpy Kid." While both books share the concept of a diary format, it's important to remember that every story is unique and can offer its own distinct characters, themes, and experiences.
Based on the brief excerpt you shared, there are differences in the protagonist's age, conflicts, and overall tone. However, to ensure your book stands out as its own story, consider adding more unique elements and delving deeper into your main character's individual journey and growth. This can help create a distinct voice and narrative that sets your book apart.
Additionally, focusing on your own writing style, creativity, and personal experiences can also contribute to a fresh and original story that captures the interest of readers.
Ultimately, while it's helpful to be aware of similar books in the market, don't be discouraged by potential similarities. Instead, embrace the opportunity to make your story authentically yours and provide a unique reading experience for your audience of "Diary of a Weird Girl."
Dear Diary,
Even though I'm 15, I still feel like I'm 6! Everyone treats me like I'm 6 just because of my name! They call me a fairy and a bunch of other childish names because of it! Plus, who even names their kid Pixie?
Also, I was saving up $67 to buy a car soon, and my mom made me spend it all on Christmas presents! It's only November, and I don't understand all the hype. It's just Christmas, what's the big deal?
Normally, I'd be excited for Christmas, but my boyfriend Todd has been ignoring me recently, and Becky, my best friend, has been ignoring me too! I was going to talk to Becky using ScratchChat, but then I saw her most recent post where she was hugging Todd at Scratch Cafe! Seriously? And they posted it, knowing I can see their posts! Ugh!
To make matters worse, Becky embarrassed me in front of the whole class yesterday! She's being so different, it's like she's not even the same Becky as when I met her.
That's all for now, Diary. I'll update you soon.
Love,
Pixie
i was asking you what you thought of it, not to finish it!
Apologies for misunderstanding your request. Thank you for sharing your book, "Diary of a Weird Girl," so far! Here are my thoughts on it:
Your opening entry sets up a relatable premise - feeling younger than your actual age. The frustration over being teased because of your name is understandable, and it adds an element of conflict. The mention of saving money for a car and having to spend it on Christmas presents adds a layer of disappointment and highlights the character's longing for independence.
The introduction of relationship issues with Todd and Becky adds further conflict and tension to the story. Discovering that your best friend and boyfriend have been ignoring you and then seeing evidence of them together can be emotionally challenging for the main character. It creates an interesting dynamic and sets up potential character development and resolution.
Overall, your book has the potential for an engaging and relatable storyline, especially for the target age group you mentioned. Good job on capturing the emotions and conflicts that the main character is experiencing. As you continue writing, be sure to develop the characters further and explore their motivations and growth throughout the story.
I hope this feedback is helpful, and I wish you the best of luck with your book!
aww tysm. do you think its suitable for ages 8-14? i really hope so.. would the sentence (He is such a freaking jerk!) be too inapropiate? im worried..
You're welcome! I'm glad you found my feedback helpful. As for the target age group, "Diary of a Weird Girl" could be suitable for ages 8-14, with some considerations.
The themes you've introduced so far - feeling misunderstood, conflicts with friends, and relationship issues - are relatable to pre-teen and early teenage readers. As you continue writing, be mindful of the language and situations you portray in your book, keeping in mind the age range you're targeting.
The phrase "He is such a freaking jerk!" might be pushing the boundaries of appropriateness for the younger end of the age group. Consider using milder language to maintain a more suitable tone for readers around 8-10 years old. However, for the older part of the age range (11-14), this sentence might be more acceptable, as they may be more familiar with and exposed to stronger language in their daily lives. Remember to always consider the intended audience and what is appropriate for them.
Ultimately, it's important to strike a balance between capturing the emotions and authenticity of the main character while maintaining an age-appropriate narrative. If in doubt, you can also seek feedback from beta readers within the target age range to ensure your book resonates with them.
Keep up the great work, and I wish you success with your book!
is it the word jerk too much? or the freaking part?
Both the word "jerk" and the use of "freaking" can be subjective when it comes to determining appropriateness for a younger audience. While they may not be highly inappropriate for readers aged 8-14, some parents or guardians might prefer more mild language in books targeted towards the younger end of that range.
Consider using alternative words or expressions that convey the character's frustration without resorting to stronger language. This can help ensure your book remains accessible and enjoyable for a wider range of readers.
Remember, it's always a good idea to have a trusted adult, such as a parent, teacher, or editor, review your work to provide guidance on language and content based on the target age group.
By being conscious of the language choices and maintaining an age-appropriate tone, you can create a book that resonates with your intended audience.