Proofread the passage about Bob Dylan
Directions: The passage below contains several grammar mistakes. Proofread the paragraph and correct any mistakes you find (Hint: You need to identify 5 commas, 2 apostrophes, and 1 semicolon to receive full credit.)
To answer:
Rewrite or copy and paste the paragraph into the answer box.
Identify the mistakes in the passage and correct them. To do this, you may use any of the resources from the Pearson Online Classroom and the Live Lessons, as well as the example below.
Then, underline the places where you made corrections so I can easily find them and give you credit. You can also see how to do this is the example provided.
Finally, write the word “Explanation:” below your corrected paragraph. Select two corrections you made, then write two complete sentences where you explain your corrections. There is a sample explanation in the example.
Note: This question is out of 12 points. You will receive ONE point for every mistake you identify and correct, TWO points for underlining your answers, and ONE point for each explanation sentence.
An example of how to proofread:
Original Passage
An article by Business Insider reports that in 2016 on average teenagers spent six hours a day on their phones. Adding the five more hours they spend watching TV playing video games and using a computer and its clear that todays teens are more plugged in than any other generation. The negative effects of such a large number of hours spent on these devices concerns many doctors and scientists.
(5 commas, 2 apostrophes)
Answer (How you should show your work on the test):
An article by Business Insider reports that in 2016, on average, teenagers spent six hours a day on their phones. Adding the five more hours they spend watching TV, playing video games, and using a computer, and it’s clear that today's teens are more plugged in than any other generation. The negative effects of such a large number of hours spent on these devices concerns many doctors and scientists.
Explanation (A potential explanation. Note that it is in complete sentences):
The commas in this passage follow rules 4, 1, and 2. Plus, there are two apostrophes “it’s” needs an apostrophe because it is the conjunction for it is and “today’s” shows possession.
Below is the passage for you to correct.
The Swedish Academy awarded the Nobel Prize in Literature to the songwriter Bob Dylan. Many people voiced opposition that a musician should receive the highest literary honor in the world. Yet poetry and music have a long history of going hand-in-hand. The Bible tells of King David singing the highly poetic psalms accompanied by a harp. In ancient Greece lyric poems such as the Iliad and the Odyssey were meant to be sung accompanied by a lyre. The bards of medieval England composed and sang epic poems poetry is not just words it’s also the rhythm, rhyme, and meter. Its allusion metaphor allegory and myth just like Bob Dylans songs.
The Swedish Academy awarded the Nobel Prize in Literature to the songwriter, Bob Dylan. Many people voiced opposition that a musician should receive the highest literary honor in the world. Yet, poetry and music have a long history of going hand-in-hand. The Bible tells of King David singing the highly poetic psalms accompanied by a harp. In ancient Greece, lyric poems such as the Iliad and the Odyssey were meant to be sung accompanied by a lyre. The bards of medieval England composed and sang epic poems; poetry is not just words, it’s also the rhythm, rhyme, and meter. It's allusion, metaphor, allegory, and myth just like Bob Dylan's songs.
Explanation:
- I added a comma after "songwriter" to separate the name from the rest of the sentence.
- I added a comma after "Yet" to separate the introductory phrase.
- I added a comma after "Greece" to separate the clauses.
- I added a semicolon after "epic poems" to correctly separate the clauses.
- I added apostrophes in "it's" to contract "it is" and "Dylan's" to indicate possession.