I believe that Choate will be a great fit for me since it is the perfect place for me to develop my skills and improve. Another reason I want to go to Choate is because two of my older cousins have already gone to Choate. I am also inspired by your core values “INTEGRATY, RESPECT, and COMPASSION”

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I think Choate is a perfect school for me to grow and become a better student. It seems like the ideal place to develop my skills and improve myself. What's more, two of my older cousins have already attended Choate, which makes me even more excited to apply. I feel really inspired by your core values such as "INTEGRITY, RESPECT, and COMPASSION."