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Can you hear me?" I called out, my voice laced with fear. She groaned in response, her eyes fluttering open. Relief flooded over me as I realized she was alive.

"Are you able to hear me?" I shouted, my voice filled with concern. In response, a groan escaped her lips and her eyes slowly blinked open. A wave of relief washed over me as I discovered that she was still breathing.