Read this excerpt from a business proposal. With the county’s permission, I seek to vend my product “Icy Treats” at the fairgrounds on May 24, 2013. I am certified, licensed, and insured, and I will post my credentials at the event.
Which sentence exhibits the most appropriate style in which to continue this proposal?
“Icy Treats” have been served at other county events, and everyone seems to like the stuff I sell and the cheap prices! My “Icy Treats” food truck meets or exceeds all county specifications, and my product has been well received at recent county events. “Icy Treats” can’t be beat, and my food truck is the best thing that the fairgrounds will see throughout the whole season. My “Icy Treats” food truck has every rule covered, from cleanliness to licenses – there’s no reason not to have me at the fair.
The sentence that exhibits the most appropiate style for a proposal is the following:
B. My "Icy Treats" food truck meets or exceeds all county specifications, and my product has been well received at recent county events.
Option B is the sentence that contains the most information, less informality and uses a more professional style. The other options tend to have issues with this points.