"The Rippling Sea"
Such a vast, blue puddle.
A breezy wind, splashing the water in a muddle.
The scent of salty fresh air lingers in the pool.
The feeling of the water, wet and cool.
A briny taste of the salted deep.
The fishy flavor starts to seep.
This poem is supposed to use all the 5 senses to describe the ocean. You're supposed to know that it's about the sea without looking at the title, according to my assignment.
Oh, and in line one, it wasn't supposed to say 'a' breezy wind.
*Line 2
Anyone? All i'm asking is if I should change wording, and if it's using the 5 senses (you know, sight, touch, taste, sound, smell) well.
The only sense that seems missing to me is sound. Which line(s) did you intend to reflect that?
Splashing of the water from the wind.
Based on the imagery and descriptive language in the poem, we can conclude that it is indeed about the sea. However, without the title, it may not be immediately obvious to everyone. Let's go through the poem and identify the references to the five senses:
1. Sight: The poem describes the sea as a "vast, blue puddle" and talks about the water being splashed around by a breezy wind, giving it a muddled appearance.
2. Sound: While not explicitly mentioned, the reference to the wind and the water being splashed suggests a soundscape of the ocean, with the breeze rustling and the waves crashing.
3. Smell: The poem mentions the scent of "salty fresh air" lingering in the pool, which conveys the smell of the sea.
4. Touch: The feeling of the water is described as "wet and cool," giving the reader a sense of the tactile sensation of the sea.
5. Taste: The poem alludes to the "briny taste of the salted deep" and the flavor of fish starting to seep. These references paint a picture of the taste of the ocean.
By engaging all five senses in the imagery and descriptions, the poem effectively conveys the essence of the sea, allowing the reader to understand that it is about the ocean.