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I need help with this. I have the thesis statement but I can't really think of a good hook and bridge for this. This is the thesis statement: In the novel, Of Mice & Men, the author addresses the human rights issue of health and this problem is an issue in the US and in Canada. Can someone give me some good suggestions? Thanks in Advance!

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  1. First, you need to revise that thesis statement so it's smoother. It reads as if you took two related ideas and jammed them together with "and."

    Study this, and let us know how you smoothe out that thesis:
    https://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html

  2. Hi Writeacher,
    Thank you for the feedback. I used the website as an example and took more time to develop it. I was rushed before because the end of the 1st semester but my teacher gave me more time. This is my revised thesis statement:
    In the novel “Of Mice & Men,” the author addresses the human rights issue of the right for health for the mentally ill by presenting the protagonist’s mental health struggles allowing the reader to have bittersweet feelings following the protagonist’s decline while also shedding a light on how this issue is addressed in the US and Canada. How is it now? Thanks Again!

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