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Revise the sentences below to improve fluency. Specifically, add variety to the sentence types, and use transitional words so that sentences flow smoothly.
18. Summer is my favorite season. I enjoy the warm weather. School ends. I like to go swimming, have picnics, and relax. I hope you like the summer, too.

My Answer:
My favorite season is summer because I like to enjoy the warm weather when school ends. Swimming, having picnics, and relaxing are other wonderful reasons I love summer. I hope that you like summer, too.

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  1. Really good revisions! Yes!!

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  2. I know this is REALLY late but this sounds really good!!

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