The store will stay open later during the holiday season. The store will stock a variety of seasonal merchandise.
The store will have many discounts available for holiday shoppers.
22. When revising the paragraph above, the writer should address which of the following?
A. Sentence fluency
B. Punctuation
C. Paragraph organization
D. Writing clarity
i think it's C because both sentences can be combined better to explain the discounts and merchandise.
Among those four choices, yes, C is correct.
Those hideous sentences also need revision for sentence variety! Every one begins with "The store will ... " How boring!!
In addition, each sentence seems to be a topic sentence on its own. There is no paragraph development here.
but having the store being repeated not mean sentence fluency needs correction?
Great analysis! You correctly identified that the writer should address paragraph organization in order to improve the flow and coherence of the information mentioned. However, to confirm your answer choice, let's take a closer look at the other options.
A. Sentence fluency: This option relates to the overall flow and rhythm of the sentences in the paragraph. While revising the paragraph may contribute to better sentence fluency, it is not the main concern in this scenario.
B. Punctuation: If the paragraph had punctuation errors or inconsistencies, addressing them would be important for clarity and understanding. However, there are no apparent punctuation issues in the paragraph provided.
D. Writing clarity: Although revising the paragraph could potentially enhance writing clarity, the main focus of the revision should be on paragraph organization, as you correctly mentioned.
To summarize, the best answer choice is indeed C, paragraph organization, as there is a need to combine the two sentences in a way that provides a better overall explanation of the discounts and merchandise.