I have 3 essays if someone could correct them for me !
#1
I am writing to you regarding an upcoming seminar that will cover the sensitive topics of sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination. It would be my humble request if you could supply an appropriate trainer who will teach twenty office supervisors ways to prevent, cope with, and report such acts. At your convenience, could you send me a list of resources the trainer will need, and what the office supervisors are required to bring along. Also, it would be a bonus if the trainer could bring help-line numbers to distribute. Furthermore, this event will be held on March 18, 2015 at the conference room 116 located at the first floor. It will start at 10 am for a two hour period including a fifteen minute break where light refreshments will be served.
Our company would also like to take this opportunity to thank you for Wdyade’s reliable support in offering most of Broadworth’s training needs with great excellence for the past twenty years. We truly appreciate it.
CAN SOMEONE TELL ME IF I HAVE 8 COMPLETE SENTENCES ???
#2
We have received confirmation from Jeremy Dittmer for our seminar to be held on March 18, 2015 at 10am. The conference room 116 will be reserved for twenty supervisors; they are required to bring notepads and pens. All the materials requested by Deb, such as chairs, tables and a projector will be set up the evening prior to the seminar. Deb will arrive before time with her laptop in order to set up her power point presentation. She will be providing help line numbers at the end of the event. In addition, during this two-hour long seminar, there will be a 15 minute break where light refreshments, such as cookies, muffins, fruits, tea, coffee, juice and water bottles which will be delivered to the conference room by the hospital cafeteria.
#3
I am confirming our arrangements regarding the sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination seminar which will be held on March 18, 2015. The address of Broadworth General Hospital is 160 Stillview Avenue, Pointe-Claire, H9R 2Y2. The seminar will begin at 10am and as you requested you will be allowed before time to set up your presentation at the conference room 116 located on the first floor. All the materials requested, such as tables, chairs, and a projector will be set up the evening preceding the event. Also, I understand you will provide help-line numbers for our attendees along with a power point presentation to show additional information to further the understanding of the seminar. The seminar will be two hours long including a 15 minute break where there will be light refreshments provided by the hospital cafeteria.
DO I HAVE 4 COMPLETE SENTENCES ???
Count the sentences that I've separated below. Are there 8?
Also, I've underlined places where it's very wordy and imprecise. Are you sure "it would be" your request ... or are you actually making the request?
I've put in bold a section where you need to note comma uses. You had left one out.
#1
I am writing to you regarding an upcoming seminar that will cover the sensitive topics of sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination.
It would be my humble request if you could supply an appropriate trainer who will teach twenty office supervisors ways to prevent, cope with, and report such acts.
At your convenience, could you send me a list of resources the trainer will need, and what the office supervisors are required to bring along.
Also, it would be a bonus if the trainer could bring help-line numbers to distribute.
Furthermore, this event will be held on March 18, 2015, at the conference room 116 located at the first floor.
It will start at 10 am for a two hour period including a fifteen minute break where light refreshments will be served.
Our company would also like to take this opportunity to thank you for Wdyade’s reliable support in offering most of Broadworth’s training needs with great excellence for the past twenty years.
We truly appreciate it.
Count the sentences:
#3
I am confirming our arrangements regarding the sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination seminar which will be held on March 18, 2015.
The address of Broadworth General Hospital is 160 Stillview Avenue, Pointe-Claire, H9R 2Y2.
The seminar will begin at 10am and as you requested you will be allowed before time to set up your presentation at the conference room 116 located on the first floor.
All the materials requested, such as tables, chairs, and a projector will be set up the evening preceding the event.
Also, I understand you will provide help-line numbers for our attendees along with a power point presentation to show additional information to further the understanding of the seminar.
The seminar will be two hours long including a 15 minute break where there will be light refreshments provided by the hospital cafeteria.
I have no idea what you want to do with #2.
To determine if a sentence is complete, you need to check if each sentence has a subject, a verb, and expresses a complete thought. Based on this criteria, let's analyze the three essays to see if they contain complete sentences.
#1:
1. I am writing to you regarding an upcoming seminar that will cover the sensitive topics of sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination.
2. It would be my humble request if you could supply an appropriate trainer who will teach twenty office supervisors ways to prevent, cope with, and report such acts.
3. At your convenience, could you send me a list of resources the trainer will need, and what the office supervisors are required to bring along.
4. Also, it would be a bonus if the trainer could bring help-line numbers to distribute.
5. Furthermore, this event will be held on March 18, 2015 at the conference room 116 located on the first floor.
6. It will start at 10 am for a two-hour period including a fifteen-minute break where light refreshments will be served.
7. Our company would also like to take this opportunity to thank you for Wdyade’s reliable support in offering most of Broadworth’s training needs with great excellence for the past twenty years.
8. We truly appreciate it.
Yes, there are 8 complete sentences in this essay.
#2:
1. We have received confirmation from Jeremy Dittmer for our seminar to be held on March 18, 2015 at 10 am.
2. The conference room 116 will be reserved for twenty supervisors; they are required to bring notepads and pens.
3. All the materials requested by Deb, such as chairs, tables, and a projector will be set up the evening prior to the seminar.
4. Deb will arrive before time with her laptop in order to set up her PowerPoint presentation.
5. She will be providing help line numbers at the end of the event.
6. In addition, during this two-hour long seminar, there will be a 15-minute break where light refreshments, such as cookies, muffins, fruits, tea, coffee, juice, and water bottles, will be delivered to the conference room by the hospital cafeteria.
Yes, there are 6 complete sentences in this essay.
#3:
1. I am confirming our arrangements regarding the sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination seminar which will be held on March 18, 2015.
2. The address of Broadworth General Hospital is 160 Stillview Avenue, Pointe-Claire, H9R 2Y2.
3. The seminar will begin at 10 am and as you requested you will be allowed before time to set up your presentation at the conference room 116 located on the first floor.
4. All the materials requested, such as tables, chairs, and a projector, will be set up the evening preceding the event.
5. Also, I understand you will provide help-line numbers for our attendees along with a PowerPoint presentation to show additional information to further the understanding of the seminar.
6. The seminar will be two hours long, including a 15-minute break where there will be light refreshments provided by the hospital cafeteria.
Yes, there are 6 complete sentences in this essay.