Hi, I would like someone to proofread my movie review. I would like to know if there are any grammar mistakes. I would appreciate someone's feedback. Thanks! =)
In the1950s melodrama film called, All that Heaven Allows by Douglas Sirk (1955), Sirk presents a lead female character who is a widow with two children and lives in a white suburban neighborhood. The woman’s name is Carrie Scott, who is played by Jane Wyman. In the film, Carrie becomes attracted to her gardener named Ron Kirby, played by Rock Hudson. They both fall in love with each other, although, during the film Carrie becomes torn between her two children, her neighbors, and her new romance with her gardener. Carrie chooses her family and neighbors over Ron. Ron then falls from a cliff near his home and becomes terribly injured. Carrie rushes to his bedside and the film is ended with them living happily ever after, or so it seems. In this film Sirk’s use of mise en scene speaks volumes, more so, than the dialog itself. This film is a remarkable film in which the use of mise en scene is used to help viewers psychoanalyze the characters in the film.
Throughout the film, Sirk uses a lot of mise en scene to display the characters’ inner emotions. In one of the earlier scenes of this film, Carrie is in her room getting dressed for her date with Ron. She is wearing a red dress, which represents her inner lust and attraction towards Ron. Her room is very dark and quiet while she is alone in the room. When her daughter enters the room, the room’s setting changes. The daughter quickly turns on the radio, which is playing upbeat music, and she also turns on the lights in the room. Suddenly, the room becomes bright when her daughter enters her room. This scene illustrates Carrie’s love for her daughter. She feels delighted to see her, and her loneliness seemed to vanish once her daughter arrived home. In this scene the audience gets a sense of what type of mother she is towards her children. She is a loving, caring, and nurturing mother. When her children are gone, she is left alone and depressed, but once her children arrive her loneliness disappears. Later throughout the film, her children’s happiness seems to come first before anything else in her life. She tries very hard to keep both of her children happy.
In another scene, Carrie and her son start an argument in the living room. Before the argument takes place, the living room was lighted and bright. Once the tension builds up between her and her son, the living room becomes dark, and shadows begin to form in the room. A bluish color is seen in the background and dark music begins to play while they argue. Then a screen door comes between Carrie and her son. During this moment, Carrie tells her son not to let anything come between her and him. This scene is a literal take on both the characters’ tension in the room. Sirk is illustrating their emotions through décor, music, and lighting. This scene shows how her son disapproves of his mother’s new romance with Ron. He dislikes the fact that she is moving on with her life without his father, indicating that Carrie should still remain a devoted mother and a devoted wife to her dead husband.
Throughout the film, Sirk shows Carrie standing in front of several window frames in many of the scenes. For instance, in many of the scenes when she is talking to Ron, there is a shadow on her and a window frame next to her. The shadow is a display of her loneliness, her worries, and her repressed desires. The window frames indicate her inner desires trapped inside of her, suggesting she feels like a prisoner in her own life. She also carries a worried expression on her face most of the time when she is near these types of lighting and décor. These types of mise en scene help describe Carrie’s character. She is passive and keeps her feelings to herself. The shadows and window frames help viewers uncover Carrie’s hidden feelings without the need of dialog or action. These aspects of the film make it fascinating to watch because the small details throughout the film help viewers unravel Carrie’s hidden feelings.
In the end of the movie, the audience is left with the idea that Carrie and Ron will live happily ever after together. However, the way Sirk illustrates the last couple of scenes in his movie indicate that Carrie will not be completely happy in her new relationship, because she is left with half of what she had fantasized in the beginning of her relationship with Ron. The color scheme inside Ron’s house remains a bluish color, suggesting coldness instead of warmth. The windows in Ron’s house might seem bigger than Carrie’s house, suggesting that Carrie will still remain trapped in some way or another. Some might assume that Sirk deliberately placed those visual designs at the end of the film instead of placing dialog. The mise en scene might have been used to communicate to the audience what lies ahead in Carrie and Ron’s relationship.
Sirk’s use of mise en scene in his film helps communicate more messages across to his audience. His placement of color, lighting, costumes, and décor helps bring out missing dialog between the characters, and it also displays the characters’ inner emotions. The shadows, lighting, and music also help describe Carrie’s relationship with her two children. This film is worth watching because viewers are not only looking at the actors performances to understand the plot of the movie, but are constantly looking for visual items that might signify something different. The small details in this film make a big impact in the storyline. For this reason, the mise en scene used throughout this film makes this film unique and entertaining to watch.
Throughout the film, Sirk uses a lot of mise en scene to display the characters’ inner emotions. In one of the earlier scenes of this film, Carrie is in her room getting dressed for her date with Ron. She is wearing a red dress, which represents her inner lust and attraction towards Ron. Her room is very dark and quiet while she is alone in the room. When her daughter enters the room, the room’s setting changes. The daughter quickly turns on the radio, which is playing upbeat music, and she also turns on the lights in the room. Suddenly, the room becomes bright when her daughter enters her room. This scene illustrates Carrie’s love for her daughter. She feels delighted to see her, and her loneliness seemed to vanish once her daughter arrived home. In this scene the audience gets a sense of what type of mother she is towards her children. She is a loving, caring, and nurturing mother. When her children are gone, she is left alone and depressed, but once her children arrive her loneliness disappears. Later throughout the film, her children’s happiness seems to come first before anything else in her life. She tries very hard to keep both of her children happy.
In another scene, Carrie and her son start an argument in the living room. Before the argument takes place, the living room was lighted and bright. Once the tension builds up between her and her son, the living room becomes dark, and shadows begin to form in the room. A bluish color is seen in the background and dark music begins to play while they argue. Then a screen door comes between Carrie and her son. During this moment, Carrie tells her son not to let anything come between her and him. This scene is a literal take on both the characters’ tension in the room. Sirk is illustrating their emotions through décor, music, and lighting. This scene shows how her son disapproves of his mother’s new romance with Ron. He dislikes the fact that she is moving on with her life without his father, indicating that Carrie should still remain a devoted mother and a devoted wife to her dead husband.
Throughout the film, Sirk shows Carrie standing in front of several window frames in many of the scenes. For instance, in many of the scenes when she is talking to Ron, there is a shadow on her and a window frame next to her. The shadow is a display of her loneliness, her worries, and her repressed desires. The window frames indicate her inner desires trapped inside of her, suggesting she feels like a prisoner in her own life. She also carries a worried expression on her face most of the time when she is near these types of lighting and décor. These types of mise en scene help describe Carrie’s character. She is passive and keeps her feelings to herself. The shadows and window frames help viewers uncover Carrie’s hidden feelings without the need of dialog or action. These aspects of the film make it fascinating to watch because the small details throughout the film help viewers unravel Carrie’s hidden feelings.
In the end of the movie, the audience is left with the idea that Carrie and Ron will live happily ever after together. However, the way Sirk illustrates the last couple of scenes in his movie indicate that Carrie will not be completely happy in her new relationship, because she is left with half of what she had fantasized in the beginning of her relationship with Ron. The color scheme inside Ron’s house remains a bluish color, suggesting coldness instead of warmth. The windows in Ron’s house might seem bigger than Carrie’s house, suggesting that Carrie will still remain trapped in some way or another. Some might assume that Sirk deliberately placed those visual designs at the end of the film instead of placing dialog. The mise en scene might have been used to communicate to the audience what lies ahead in Carrie and Ron’s relationship.
Sirk’s use of mise en scene in his film helps communicate more messages across to his audience. His placement of color, lighting, costumes, and décor helps bring out missing dialog between the characters, and it also displays the characters’ inner emotions. The shadows, lighting, and music also help describe Carrie’s relationship with her two children. This film is worth watching because viewers are not only looking at the actors performances to understand the plot of the movie, but are constantly looking for visual items that might signify something different. The small details in this film make a big impact in the storyline. For this reason, the mise en scene used throughout this film makes this film unique and entertaining to watch.
In another scene, Carrie and her son start an argument in the living room. Before the argument takes place, the living room was lighted and bright. Once the tension builds up between her and her son, the living room becomes dark, and shadows begin to form in the room. A bluish color is seen in the background and dark music begins to play while they argue. Then a screen door comes between Carrie and her son. During this moment, Carrie tells her son not to let anything come between her and him. This scene is a literal take on both the characters’ tension in the room. Sirk is illustrating their emotions through décor, music, and lighting. This scene shows how her son disapproves of his mother’s new romance with Ron. He dislikes the fact that she is moving on with her life without his father, indicating that Carrie should still remain a devoted mother and a devoted wife to her dead husband.
Throughout the film, Sirk shows Carrie standing in front of several window frames in many of the scenes. For instance, in many of the scenes when she is talking to Ron, there is a shadow on her and a window frame next to her. The shadow is a display of her loneliness, her worries, and her repressed desires. The window frames indicate her inner desires trapped inside of her, suggesting she feels like a prisoner in her own life. She also carries a worried expression on her face most of the time when she is near these types of lighting and décor. These types of mise en scene help describe Carrie’s character. She is passive and keeps her feelings to herself. The shadows and window frames help viewers uncover Carrie’s hidden feelings without the need of dialog or action. These aspects of the film make it fascinating to watch because the small details throughout the film help viewers unravel Carrie’s hidden feelings.
In the end of the movie, the audience is left with the idea that Carrie and Ron will live happily ever after together. However, the way Sirk illustrates the last couple of scenes in his movie indicate that Carrie will not be completely happy in her new relationship, because she is left with half of what she had fantasized in the beginning of her relationship with Ron. The color scheme inside Ron’s house remains a bluish color, suggesting coldness instead of warmth. The windows in Ron’s house might seem bigger than Carrie’s house, suggesting that Carrie will still remain trapped in some way or another. Some might assume that Sirk deliberately placed those visual designs at the end of the film instead of placing dialog. The mise en scene might have been used to communicate to the audience what lies ahead in Carrie and Ron’s relationship.
Sirk’s use of mise en scene in his film helps communicate more messages across to his audience. His placement of color, lighting, costumes, and décor helps bring out missing dialog between the characters, and it also displays the characters’ inner emotions. The shadows, lighting, and music also help describe Carrie’s relationship with her two children. This film is worth watching because viewers are not only looking at the actors performances to understand the plot of the movie, but are constantly looking for visual items that might signify something different. The small details in this film make a big impact in the storyline. For this reason, the mise en scene used throughout this film makes this film unique and entertaining to watch.
Throughout the film, Sirk shows Carrie standing in front of several window frames in many of the scenes. For instance, in many of the scenes when she is talking to Ron, there is a shadow on her and a window frame next to her. The shadow is a display of her loneliness, her worries, and her repressed desires. The window frames indicate her inner desires trapped inside of her, suggesting she feels like a prisoner in her own life. She also carries a worried expression on her face most of the time when she is near these types of lighting and décor. These types of mise en scene help describe Carrie’s character. She is passive and keeps her feelings to herself. The shadows and window frames help viewers uncover Carrie’s hidden feelings without the need of dialog or action. These aspects of the film make it fascinating to watch because the small details throughout the film help viewers unravel Carrie’s hidden feelings.
In the end of the movie, the audience is left with the idea that Carrie and Ron will live happily ever after together. However, the way Sirk illustrates the last couple of scenes in his movie indicate that Carrie will not be completely happy in her new relationship, because she is left with half of what she had fantasized in the beginning of her relationship with Ron. The color scheme inside Ron’s house remains a bluish color, suggesting coldness instead of warmth. The windows in Ron’s house might seem bigger than Carrie’s house, suggesting that Carrie will still remain trapped in some way or another. Some might assume that Sirk deliberately placed those visual designs at the end of the film instead of placing dialog. The mise en scene might have been used to communicate to the audience what lies ahead in Carrie and Ron’s relationship.
Sirk’s use of mise en scene in his film helps communicate more messages across to his audience. His placement of color, lighting, costumes, and décor helps bring out missing dialog between the characters, and it also displays the characters’ inner emotions. The shadows, lighting, and music also help describe Carrie’s relationship with her two children. This film is worth watching because viewers are not only looking at the actors performances to understand the plot of the movie, but are constantly looking for visual items that might signify something different. The small details in this film make a big impact in the storyline. For this reason, the mise en scene used throughout this film makes this film unique and entertaining to watch.
In the end of the movie, the audience is left with the idea that Carrie and Ron will live happily ever after together. However, the way Sirk illustrates the last couple of scenes in his movie indicate that Carrie will not be completely happy in her new relationship, because she is left with half of what she had fantasized in the beginning of her relationship with Ron. The color scheme inside Ron’s house remains a bluish color, suggesting coldness instead of warmth. The windows in Ron’s house might seem bigger than Carrie’s house, suggesting that Carrie will still remain trapped in some way or another. Some might assume that Sirk deliberately placed those visual designs at the end of the film instead of placing dialog. The mise en scene might have been used to communicate to the audience what lies ahead in Carrie and Ron’s relationship.
Sirk’s use of mise en scene in his film helps communicate more messages across to his audience. His placement of color, lighting, costumes, and décor helps bring out missing dialog between the characters, and it also displays the characters’ inner emotions. The shadows, lighting, and music also help describe Carrie’s relationship with her two children. This film is worth watching because viewers are not only looking at the actors performances to understand the plot of the movie, but are constantly looking for visual items that might signify something different. The small details in this film make a big impact in the storyline. For this reason, the mise en scene used throughout this film makes this film unique and entertaining to watch.
Sirk’s use of mise en scene in his film helps communicate more messages across to his audience. His placement of color, lighting, costumes, and décor helps bring out missing dialog between the characters, and it also displays the characters’ inner emotions. The shadows, lighting, and music also help describe Carrie’s relationship with her two children. This film is worth watching because viewers are not only looking at the actors performances to understand the plot of the movie, but are constantly looking for visual items that might signify something different. The small details in this film make a big impact in the storyline. For this reason, the mise en scene used throughout this film makes this film unique and entertaining to watch.
On the 4th post I have written, "Throughout the film, Sirk shows Carrie standing in front of several window frames in many of the scenes."
I have changed it to this instead, "In many scenes, Sirk shows Carrie standing in front of several window frames."
I noticed that I used "Throughout the film," on my second paragraph. I want to avoid similar transition.
In the1950s melodrama film called, All that Heaven Allows by Douglas Sirk (1955), Sirk presents a lead female character who is a widow with two children and lives in a white suburban neighborhood. The woman’s name is Carrie Scott, who is played by Jane Wyman. In the film, Carrie becomes attracted to her gardener named Ron Kirby, played by Rock Hudson. They both fall in love with each other, although, during the film Carrie becomes torn between her two children, her neighbors, and her new romance with her gardener. Carrie chooses her family and neighbors over Ron. Ron then falls from a cliff near his home and becomes terribly injured. Carrie rushes to his bedside and the film is ended with them living happily ever after, or so it seems. In this film Sirk’s use of mise en scene speaks volumes, more so, than the dialog itself. This film is a remarkable film in which the use of mise en scene is used to help viewers psychoanalyze the characters in the film.
1. You need a space before "1950s"
2.Make sure you put the film title and any non-English words into italics.
3. Your writing is wordy in places; for example, "The woman’s name is Carrie Scott, who is played by Jane Wyman. In the film, Carrie becomes attracted..."
You can simplify this by cutting out unnecessary words: Carrie Scott, played by Jane Wyman, becomes attracted ...
4. The last two sentences are redundant; combine them, and make sure the reader will know what "mise en scene" means and what "speaks volumes" means.
Again, you're using the French phrase without explanation. Make sure it's clearly explained in the first paragraph so that it makes sense in the rest of your paper.
The rest of the second paragraph looks OK, if a bit wordy in places.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/concise.htm
Nice job.
Again, very nice.
Good!
Need for possessive: actors' performances
Can you think of better wording than "big impact"? Is someone or something being hit by something else? Try using "great effect" or "small details in this film are quite powerful..."
Good change.
I have deleted some words from the first two paragraphs. What do you think? Do they sound better?
In the 1950s melodrama film All that Heaven Allows by Douglas Sirk (1955), Sirk presents a lead female character who is a widow with two children and lives in a white suburban neighborhood. Carrie Scott, played by Jane Wyman, becomes attracted to her gardener Ron Kirby, played by Rock Hudson. They both fall in love, and Carrie becomes torn between her two children, her neighbors, and her new romance with her gardener. Carrie chooses her family and neighbors over Ron. Ron falls from a cliff near his home and becomes terribly injured. Carrie rushes to his bedside and the film is ended with them living happily ever after, or so it seems.
Throughout the film, Sirk uses a lot of mise en scene to display the characters’ inner emotions. In one of the earlier scenes, Carrie is in her room getting dressed for her date with Ron. She is wearing a red dress, which represents her inner lust and attraction towards Ron. Her room is very dark and quiet while she is alone in the room. When her daughter enters the room, the room’s setting changes. The daughter quickly turns on the radio, which is playing upbeat music, and she also turns on the lights in the room. Suddenly, the room becomes bright when her daughter enters her room. This scene illustrates Carrie’s love for her daughter. She feels delighted to see her, and her loneliness seemed to vanish once her daughter arrived home. In this scene the audience gets a sense of what type of mother she is. She is a loving, caring, and nurturing mother. When her children are gone, she is left alone and depressed, but once her children arrive her loneliness disappears. Later throughout the film, her children’s happiness seems to come first in her life. She tries very hard to keep both of her children happy.
Throughout the film, Sirk uses a lot of mise en scene to display the characters’ inner emotions. In one of the earlier scenes, Carrie is in her room getting dressed for her date with Ron. She is wearing a red dress, which represents her inner lust and attraction towards Ron. Her room is very dark and quiet while she is alone in the room. When her daughter enters the room, the room’s setting changes. The daughter quickly turns on the radio, which is playing upbeat music, and she also turns on the lights in the room. Suddenly, the room becomes bright when her daughter enters her room. This scene illustrates Carrie’s love for her daughter. She feels delighted to see her, and her loneliness seemed to vanish once her daughter arrived home. In this scene the audience gets a sense of what type of mother she is. She is a loving, caring, and nurturing mother. When her children are gone, she is left alone and depressed, but once her children arrive her loneliness disappears. Later throughout the film, her children’s happiness seems to come first. She tries very hard to keep both of her children happy.
In the third sentence, I'd delete the word "both."
In the fourth sentence, you should change the word "between" to "among" since she is being torn by more than two elements.
In the next to last sentence, how much time elapses between 1) her choosing family and neighbors and 2) Ron's falling off a cliff? You need to give some indication at the beginning of that sentence how much time elapses between the two events.
Comma is needed after "bedside."
Much better, overall!
I still think you need a brief explanation of the term mise en scène (and you need to get that accent mark in there, too!).
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mise_en_sc%C3%A8ne
In this sentence, some tightening up can occur: "...audience gets a sense of what type of mother she is. She is a loving, caring, and nurturing mother."
How can you combine those two sentences without losing any of the meaning?
In the next to last sentence, it should read either "Later" or "Throughout the film..." To have both is somewhat contradictory.
is this okay?
Later in the film, Ron falls from a cliff and becomes terribly injured.
Thanks for your help!
audience gets a sense that she is a loving, caring, and nurturing mother.
thanks again. =)
Ahh, much better. Good.
Do you know how to get that accent mark in the word scène? If you have a PC and are using Windows, you type sc, then hold down the Alt key while you press 0232 on the number pad at the right (not the numbers across the top of the keyboard), then type ne to finish the word. Once you get it typed in correctly, you can use copy and paste to fix it in the rest of your paper.
Yes, that reads fine.
Thanks. I actually copied and paste yours with the accent mark and added it to my paper. I changed the font style and size, but thank you for letting me know how to do it using the computer. I didn't know how.
http://www.ramsch.org/martin/uni/fmi-hp/iso8859-1.html
In case you ever need such a thing again, here's a chart that helps. The description of each character is on the left, then an example in the next column, and the code in the third column. The &# seems to stand for Alt + 0 before the three numbers that complete the code.
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Thank you. I appreciate all your help. =)
You're very welcome. It's a pleasure to read a paper that needs so little fixing!
Go get A's!!!
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very intereseting seeing the development of an answer.
she is called cary in the movie not carrie