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hey you!
i have to wirte a letter to a prof of mine .. she is a grammar teacher, so that it would be great when there are no mistakes in the mail.. can somebody look it up?

Dear Ms...

It looks at the moment that I am not able to come to the course at 23. June, because of I need to see a doctor.
I told you that I am diseased with Multiple Sklerose. Now started with a therapy and my doctor needs to see me on that monday, to look wether the medicine works the way it should or not.
I will try to dissarrange the appointment but I'm not sure that it will work because to get a appointment at a neurologist is not that easy. But I hope that if it is not possible to change the date, my place in course will persist.

Cindy

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  1. What corrections do you think should be made to this letter?

    I'll be glad to check your editing.

  2. I'm not sure about the beginning. Can I really beginn the way I did it?

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    posted by Cindy
  3. Here's a better way to start:

    It looks like I will not be able to attend the class on 23 June.

  4. wouldn' it be better if I say at the moment it looks like...?

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    posted by Cindy
  5. It looks like I willmnot be able to attend the class on 23. June,because I need to see a doctor.
    I told you that I am diseased with Multiple Sklerose. Now I finally started with a therapy and my doctor needs to see me on that monday, to look if the medicine works the way it should or not.
    I will try to dissarrange the appointment but I'm not sure that it will work because to get a appointment at a neurologist is not that easy. But I hope that if it is not possible to change the date, my place in course will persist.

    is it hood that way?

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    posted by Cindy
  6. good not hood... sorry for that.

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  7. It looks good. I'd change --

    I will try to disarrange the . . .
    to
    I will try to reschedule the . . .

    my place in course will persist.
    to
    I'll still be a member of this class.

  8. multiple sclerosis
    Is the correct spelling I think.

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    posted by Damon
  9. Try this:

    Dear Ms...

    It looks like I will not be able to attend class on 23 June because I need to see a doctor.

    I told you that I have multiple sclerosis. I have finally started therapy, and my doctor needs to see me on that Monday to see if the treatment and medicine work the way it should or not.

    I will try to reschedule the appointment, but I'm not sure that it will work because getting an appointment with a neurologist is not that easy. But I hope that, if it is not possible to change the date, I'll still be a member of this class.

    Cindy

  10. Correction:

    ... the way they should.

  11. Thank you all so mich for your help!

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