english- please help me edit

Hi I was wondering if anyone can help me edit/proofread my english essay =)

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  1. oh.. it i don't think it would fit.. so maybe i can email it =)

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    posted by Dina
  2. Thank you for using the Jiskha Homework Help Forum. The problem is that you can not "cut and paste" here. You will need to retype the entire thing here. Then go away and come back to be sure it posted.

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  3. alright. I will do that =)

    here we go


    Love, for some can be a very simple and beautiful concept, and yet, for others difficult, complicated, frustrating and often misunderstood. The word itself is a verb, which describes the feelings that one person has towards another. The feelings inside and of what are experienced are great. Love can be easy to find, and yet difficult for some. For J. Alfred Prufrock in the poem “The Love Story of J. Alfred Prufrock” and Mike from the movie “Swingers,” love was like a rabbit: cute and fragile, but hard to catch. To them, love was an adventure through the Amazon rainforest, trying to escape and survive and falling prey to both self-consciousness and cowardice.

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    posted by Dina
  4. In the poem “The Love Story of J. Alfred Prufrock,” the narrator, Prufrock depicted himself as a skinny man who was balding. Prufrock explained that he had the right clothes to look presentable, but not the right personality to approach the unknown woman that he describes in the poem. He placed himself in a large dilemma that he looked upon as a life or death situation. Prufrock cannot make up his mind on whether or not to express his feelings to a woman that he has loved for a decent period of time. He believed that he was not worthy because of his looks and that he was not up to par. The fact that he measured his “life with coffee spoons” showed that he did not live his life to the fullest and he did not take enough risks to possibly build up more courage. Prufrock describes himself as if he was “pinned and wriggling on the wall” like an insect, held back and judged upon by those who pass by.

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    posted by Dina
  5. Aside from Prufrock, Mike from the movie “Swingers” seemed to go through a similar problem in the beginning, but has a different and much happier ending. Mike was proven to have a much more successful relationship in the past, and after he broke up with the woman that he supposedly loved, he placed himself in a similar dilemma as Prufrock. However, he became depressed about loosing his ex-girlfriend and all he wanted to do was sulk. He becomes shy around women, and did not think that he was even worthy enough to talk to them. Like Prufrock, Mike believes that he can act and dress cool on the outside, but on the inside he was not prepared to talk start dating again. Mike is constantly persuaded by his friends to go out and have some fun but he tried his best to refuse, only to be dragged along at the end.

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    posted by Dina
  6. Mike and Prufrock are both very lonely inside and they wanted to share their lives with someone special. They had difficulties approaching a woman, whether they knew them or not. In “The Love Song by J. Alfred Prufrock,” Prufrock did not know if he should go down to talk to the girl that he loved or not and in the movie “Swingers,” Mike had the same problem, but instead he did not know whether or not he should call Nikki, the girl that he met at the bar. They both believed that if they did something wrong as they spoke to the opposite sex, then it would be the end of the world.

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    posted by Dina
  7. Aside from their similar problems with women, they also seemed to have a similar outlook on life. Like before, Prufrock never really lived his life to the fullest. He would procrastinate if he had to take a risk, like when he had to admit his feelings towards the woman that he loved. In the movie, Mike did the same thing when his best friend Trent asked him to go to Las Vegas to have some fun and hopefully meet someone new. Mike kept on saying that it was not a very good idea and that he has an “audition for a pilot at nine.” Mike and Prufrock always try to find an excuse to get out of any social interactions with women.

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    posted by Dina
  8. Both the movie and the poem began with two very similar characters in the beginning, however Mike is considered to be more of a dynamic character while Prufrock was portrayed as a static character. This ultimately means that at the end, they became two separate people. I do not believe that the film “Swingers” is directly parallel to the poem “The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock” because Prufrock ended up lonely at the end and Mike ended up with someone he cared about. Mike had the support of his friends, who helped him gain his self-confidence back, while Prufrock was alone and tried to fight the problem on his own, he even shows his regret at the end when where he explained how he has heard “mermaids singing, each to each” but not to him. It is as if Prufrock feels that he is no longer worthy to be in the presence of anything as magical as a mermaid. Unfortunately, I do not know what has happened to Prufrock in the past, he might have had a successful relationship or not, but no one knows what surprises or turning points that Prufrock may have in the future. Like a rabbit, love can hop away from ones life only to come right back the next day.

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    posted by Dina
  9. sorry it was long.. please help =)

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  10. For some, love can be a very simple and beautiful concept, and yet, for others difficult, complicated, frustrating<~~add comma and often misunderstood. The word itself is a verb, which describes the feelings that one person has towards another<~~You need to double-check what "love" is -- verb? noun? adjective? what? And remember that verbs don't "describe" anything. The feelings inside and of what are experienced<~~what? are great<~~"great" in what way; you need to be more specific; and the following sentence doesn't really follow!~~>. Love can be easy to find, and yet difficult for some. For J. Alfred Prufrock in the poem “The Love Story of J. Alfred Prufrock” and Mike from<~~change "from" to "in" the movie “Swingers,”<~~movie titles need to be in italics or underlined, not in quotation marks love was like a rabbit: cute and fragile, but hard to catch. To them, love was an adventure through the Amazon rainforest, trying to escape and survive and falling prey to both self-consciousness and cowardice.<~~All these concepts in the last sentence are clearly explained in the rest of your paper, right? And in this order?

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  11. In the poem “The Love Story of J. Alfred Prufrock,” the narrator, Prufrock<~~add comma depicted himself as a skinny man who was balding. Prufrock explained that he had the right clothes to look presentable, but not the right personality to approach the unknown woman whom he describes in the poem. He faced a great dilemma that he looked upon as a life or death situation. Prufrock cannot<~~you've been using past tense, but now a sudden shift to present; be sure to be consistent - one or the other make up his mind about whether or not<~~delete "or not" - it's implied in "whether" to express his feelings to a woman whom he has loved for a decent<~~what does that mean? period of time. He believed that he was not worthy because of his looks and that he was not up to par. The fact that he measured his “life with coffee spoons” showed that he did not live his life to the fullest<~~add comma and he did not take enough risks to possibly<~~delete "possibly" build up more courage. Prufrock describes<~~verb tense? himself as if he was<~~subjunctive; needs to be "were" “pinned and wriggling on the wall” like an insect, held back and judged upon by those who pass by.

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  12. Like Prufrock, Mike in the movie “Swingers”<~~movie titles are not in quotation marks; see my remark in the first paragraph seemed to go through a similar problem in the beginning, but he experiences a different and much happier ending. Mike had a much more successful relationship in the past, and after he broke up with the woman that he supposedly loved, he placed himself in a dilemma similar to Prufrock's. However, he became depressed about loosing<~~wrong word; you need "losing" his ex-girlfriend<~~add comma and all he wanted to do was sulk. He becomes<~~verb tense shift shy around women, and did not think that he was even worthy enough to talk to them. Like Prufrock, Mike believes that he can act and dress cool on the outside, but on the inside he was not prepared to talk<~~?? start dating again. Mike is constantly persuaded by his friends to go out and have some fun<~~add comma but he tried his best to refuse, only to be dragged along at the end.

  13. Please go through the three paragraphs I've edited for you and apply those ideas to the other paragraphs.

    Feel free to repost if you have specific sentences that need looking at.

    =)

  14. Ty so much! I will put much thought into your suggestions@

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    posted by Dina
  15. Please help me to do my english homework.my teacher gave me a project on value of exercise.I am unable to do my homework.please help me!

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