posted by rfvv
1. How did the king look when the old man walked away with a golden apple in his hand? He looked puzzled. The king looks a little upset with the two soldiers on his both sides. The old man was able to defeat the king with his lie. The king was embarrassed because of the wise old man's lie.
2. Would you describe this picture?
The king gave a signal to the two lions and they started to sing the most beautiful opera. The second man seems to be stunned to see that. The king wa able to defeat the second man with his lie.
3. How about this picture? Can you discribe it? An old man is walking away and a golden apple was in his hand. He was carying the golden apple while it was raised.
[Would you check the passages? Correct any errors, please. Thank you for your help.]
In 1 and 2, I'd make sure all verbs are in past tense. Switching back and forth from past to present and then to past again is inconsistent and confusing.
In 1, I'd make this correction:
The king looked a little upset with a soldier on each side.
In 2, I'd make these corrections:
The second man seemed to be stunned to see that. The king was able to defeat the second man with his lie.
Or do you mean this: "defeat the second man who had lied."
In 3, I'd make these corrections, including keeping the verbs in present tense:
How about this picture? Can you describe it? An old man is walking away with a golden apple in his hand. He is holding the golden apple up high.