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For my French homework, I have written a letter of motivation. I would be grateful if you could read it and suggest where I could improve.

Monsieur,

J’ai objectif de travailler dans le domaine service client. Je voudrais être responsable grands comptes dans votre entreprise.
Mon diplôme en affaires m’a dotée un savoir-faire de commerce et de service client.
Par ailleurs, j’ai presque dix ans d’expérience dans le même domaine.
Mes expériences extensives m’ont permis de développer une grande faculté d’adaptation et une grande rigueur de travail. J’ai expérience de gérant les complaintes des clients, l’amélioration de méthode de service client et l’établissement des buts pour un équipe.
Enfin, mon pratique courante dans le domaine et mon sens de l’organisation seront des atouts supplémentaires pour m’impliquer efficacement dans le travail proposé.
Souhaitant vivement vous rencontrer pour vous exposer plus amplement mon expérience et mes motivations, je me tiens a votre disposition et vous prie de recevoir, Monsieur, l’expression de mes salutations distinguées.

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Kiran

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    I'll send this to our French tutor.

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    Often, nouns in French use the definite article: l'objectif
    le domaine de
    responsable de
    Why dotée? Do you believe m' is the direct object or the indirect object and are you feminine?
    l'expérience
    gérante - if you are feminine + a preposition (des/pour)
    une équipe
    Me pratique
    Souhaitant? or J'espère que vous rencontriez (le subjonctif here)
    (pour vous exposer) is a bit redundant?
    motivations; je (run-on sentence here)

    Very enterprising!

    Mme

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