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Im doing an essay and this is the format for it.

Intro of 5 or more sentences, where you introduce your thesis statement (that which you will be writing about - in the form of a statement, or point of view)

Two or three paragraphs, of about 8-10 sentences each, where you support that which you are saying with examples, and or reasons.
(body of essay)

Concluding paragraph of five or more sentences where you have proven your point of view.

There were two topics that I could choose from, and I chose this one...

Discuss three pros(for) and three cons(against) concerning Confederation. What was happening at this time? How did the final outcome of the Dominion of Canada come into reality? Which people were important at this time, and what strategies did they use - for and against?


Uniting the different parts of Canada wasn’t as easy as it seemed. It took lots of planning and negotiation. Everyone had different opinions; some opposed and some agreed about the idea of Confederation. It wasn’t easy to come up with an agreement. The people who worked together to unite Canada had a hard job.


Three Pros concerning Confederation were that a strong central government could be developed and then all the members of that government could share their ideas which would lead to the growth of the entire country. The railink would bring happiness to all of the provinces, and Halifax would become the centre port of trade. The country overall would become important and it wouldn't have to be dependent upon any other country. All could benefit from the union of the colonies. The three cons were that if Confederation was to take place, than the Maritime Provinces wouldn't be able to maintain their ties with Britain. Also, the French and English would have a tough time getting along. They are a separate nation, and could never become one. The Maritime Provinces could grow strong and independent on their own. At this time, Conferences were being held. There was the Charlottetown Conference, Quebec Conference, and the London Conference. Everyone was sharing their ideas on what should be done, and if Confederation should take place. The Dominion of Canada was finalized with the signing by Queen Victoria of the BNA Act on March 29th, 1867. People who held importance during this time were the leaders from the colonies, as they participated in the Confederation conferences. They were known as the “Fathers” of Confederation. All individuals who went to the conferences played an important role, because their opinions mattered. They tried to gather people on their side to either oppose or support confederation.


Confederation was fairly taken place. Many opposers did not want a central government to be built, and it never did get built. The whole nation became a federation. The colonies had been united.

(I don't like my conclusion and I have tried to change it, but its not working:()

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    DON'T start any paper's first draft by writing the introduction! How can you introduce a paper that you haven't written yet?

    Follow the writing process, whether you're writing for science, history, English, or whatever:

    Prewriting: Brainstorm, research, plan, outline, thesis statement

    Writing: Write first draft by starting with section II of your outline; write the introduction after the body of the paper is written; write the conclusion last.

    Polishing: Revise, concentrating first on the body of the paper, then the intro, then the concl (revision = making sure ideas are logical and sequential and support your thesis); proofread (spelling, grammar, usage, etc.)

    Do you have a thesis yet? Have you done your brainstorming (and maybe research) yet? Have you written an outline?

    http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/catalogue.html#org
    from http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/catalogue.html

    http://www.angelfire.com/wi/writingprocess/

    http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/
    Check in the Essay & Research Paper Level.

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    Your thesis statement must include factual information plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)

    http://blog.eduify.com/index.php/2009/06/21/5-tips-on-how-to-write-a-strong-thesis-statement/
    Read carefully and follow ALL directions.

    http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
    This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.

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    I don't have time to rewrite all this as it is due tomorrow. I'll just stick with what I have.

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    If you could just change my conclusion a bit, I would really appreciate that.

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