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Hey, I made a thesis for my essay, but is it any good? Make any fixes to it if possible. Thanks! :)


In general, parents often provide emotional support for their children, and also will have to accept aspects and interests of their children. In the works, Romeo and Juliet, The Chrysalids, and Flowers for Algernon, the parents restrict the growth of each of their children by not allowing them to follow human nature.

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    How much of that last sentence is factual?

    How much is your own opinion?

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    Your thesis statement must include factual information plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)

    http://blog.eduify.com/index.php/2009/06/21/5-tips-on-how-to-write-a-strong-thesis-statement/
    Read carefully and follow ALL directions.

    http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
    This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.

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