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Nursing Theory as the Basis of Care
Who am I?
One of the greatest ironies of my life is that my generation has eyes yet can not see they have ears and yet can not hear. My generation has advanced so much in science and technology and yet they have forgotten the simple basic of life and existence. No wonder the Bible clearly warns his people in Jeremiah “Hear this, you foolish and senseless people, who have eyes but do not see who have ears but do not hear” (Spiritual Healing, 2009). The human living person is a dynamic unity of body, mind, and spirit. The human life at every level of being consists of the biological, the emotional, the dispositional, the rational and the spiritual unified as one. The Bible clearly tell us in Genesis chapter 2 verse 7 that “The LORD God formed the man from the soil of the ground and breathed into his nostrils the breath of life, and the man became a living being. In verse 7, “formed” is the Hebrew verb yatsar which means “to form” or “to fashion,” (Self Healing 2007) usually by plan or design. This tells me that Man was created by God. The man was a combination of a body (the soil of the ground), which linked him to creation, and a spirit (the breath of life). “Breath” is the Hebrew nyshamah, used for God and the life imparted to humans, but not animals. God did not breathe life-giving breath into the nostrils of other animals. These two things together made man a “living being” (Hebrew nephes hayyah). Humans, like the animals, are a combination of the material and immaterial. But humans have a likeness to God and an ability to relate to Him that animals do not have.
Health and Spiritual Integrity
Health is “Dynamic state in which an individual adapts to internal and external environments so that there is a state of physical emotional, intellectual, social, and spiritual well-being. (Potter & Perry, 2005). “God has endowed us with a certain amount of vital force. He has also formed us with organs suited to maintain the various functions of life and He designs that these organs shall work together in harmony. If we carefully preserve the life force and keep the delicate mechanism of the body in order, the result is health.” (White, 1942).
To Know What You Are, Find What You Are Not
The best way to find a solution to a problem is to find the root cause of the problem. Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. It is our Light, not our Darkness, that most frightens us. “Who am I?” After all, the only fact you are sure of is that you are. The ‘I am ‘is certain. The ‘I am this’ is not. Struggle to find out what you are in reality. To know what you are, you must first investigate and know what you are not. Discover first that you are not body, feelings, thoughts, time, space, and this or that, nothing, concrete or abstract, which you perceive can be you. The very act of perceiving shows that you are not what you perceive. The clearer we understand that on the level of mind we can be described in God’s image only, the quicker will we come to the end of our search and realize our optimum health.( Maharaj, 2006).
All Suffering is Born of Desire
What is ‘Wholistic Concept and an open-system approach’? In explaining this concept I will use the biblical Verse in Exodus 20:2 “I am the LORD your God, who brought you out of Egypt, out of the land of slavery. This verse is often referred to as the first commandment. This God’s spoken word is both grounding and perspective. For the last nine commandments to make sense, this sentence ‘I am the LORD your God, who brought you out of Egypt, out of the land of slavery’ (Holy Bible 1993) must be embraced completely. Personality, an Obstacle
Hosea 4:6 said “My people perish from a lack of knowledge” (Holy Bible 1993). You perish because you have forgotten your own being through your own desires and fears. To take appearance for reality is a grievous sin and the cause of all calamities. You are the all-pervading, eternal and infinitely creative awareness- consciousness of God. All else is local and temporary. Without God’s power nothing can be done. Even you would not be reading this my scholarly paper draft without him. The body is so weak and short lived. It creates needs and cravings. It limits one grievously. So let the physical expressions be limited. The State of desire and craving for anything blocks all deeper experience. Nothing of value can happen to a mind which knows exactly what it wants. For nothing the mind can visualize and want is of much value. You are Free Now
Wholistic Concept is total dependence on God. It is the absolute surrender of oneself to the maker and creator. Wholistic Concept is when you are not worried about sensations and perceptions, thoughts and feelings, desires and fears, memories and expectations. Wholistic Concept is when you are immersed in this cloud and see nothing else but a true love of God and the understanding that you are an image of God. In this cloud there is no pain or suffering.
Beyond Pain and Pleasure There is Bliss
“I am the LORD your God, who brought you out of Egypt, out of the land of slavery” demands total and complete surrender to God’s faith and makings. Establish yourself firmly in the awareness of God. This is the beginning and also the end of all endeavors. The body seeks to live. It is not life that needs the body; it is the body that needs life so why do we spend all our energy, wealth, memories and frustrations on the body while ignoring the most important which is the life itself that the body depends on to live. Just like ice turns to water, and water to vapor, and vapor dissolves in air and disappears in space, so does the body dissolve into pure awareness which is beyond all existence and non-existence. All are moved by the same power but the difference is that a realized man knows what others merely hear, but don’t experience. Intellectually they may seem convinced but in action they betray their bondage, while the realized man is always pain free. Go to the source of both pain and pleasure and be free indeed.
Your writing is full on nonsense.
"Go to the source of both pain and pleasure and be free indeed." Is this supposed to mean anything?
Now read each sentence in the last paragraph. Each one is pure dribble. Who is your intended audience? What is your point? What in the world is your thesis? I am very much reminded by this "writting" of Mary Baker Eddy's work. If that work influenced you, you need to concentrate on exactly your thesis and audience. In secular terms of defining nursing theory as a basis of care, you have greatly missed the mark.
Title: Nursing Theory as the Basis of Care
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