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Hi im writing a short story, how would i format this paragraph. Can i keep it as one paragraph or should i separate the Quotation into its own pargraph? im confused...

As she boarded the shuttle, she noticed two girls who looked about her age. She wondered if they went to her school, so she got up from her seat to find out. “Hey girls, my name is Monique Cooper, do you happen to go to West Valley High School.” Poor Monique had no idea, that not only did they go to her school, but they were also had a reputation for being bullies. These girls were vicious, sneaky and manipulative.

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    Take the dialogue out of the paragraph and indent. Also I would suggest putting a period after Cooper. and a question mark after School.
    Then continue the description.

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    So would it look like this

    As she boarded the shuttle, she noticed two girls who looked about her age. She wondered if they went to her school, so she got up from her seat to find out.

    “Hey girls my name is Monique Cooper. Do you happen to go to West Valley High School?”

    Poor Monique had no idea, that not only did they go to her school, but they also had a reputation for being bullies. These girls were vicious, sneaky and manipulative.

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    yes.

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