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the perspective on rosa parks, the bus driver, or another passenger (black,or white} i have to write a sentnce that would ,make the people want to read it. and a possible ending

What have you said in the body of your paper?

what do you mean? i doing an outline right now

Good. After you do your outline, then write the body of your paper. After all, you can't introduce something without knowing all about it.

http://www.crlsresearchguide.org/15_Body_Of_Paper.asp

so for my beginning hook(which is a sentence that will make people want to read it) i can right this...

sitting on the bus tired from long day of work. the white bus driver barked saying to get out of the seats, obeying i stood up noticing another colored lady sitting there not listening when he threatened to call the police she sat there, terrified of what would happen to her i got out silently cheering her on for being a brave soul.

idk it sound terrible from my perspective but idk what to write.

What are the main points in your outline?

how there was a colored passenger who stood up when was asked but saw a brave women who was tired of being mistreated so decided to not listen. and from then on showed how it was starting to be a different world from boycott to marching and so on and from then on things were starting to be different thrpugh hard work and dedication

That is not an outline.

oh for my outline

the main points is how she refused to get up from her seat. and what happened after her arrest

OK. Write a paragraph about each of those two points.

After you've finished toth of those paragraphs, post them here.

Be sure to proofread so that you have complete sentences and appropriate capitalization and punctuation.

rosa parks was tired therefor she did not surrender her seat, she wasn't tired of a hard day of working she was tired of giving in. though many didn't approve of this method many thought it was a great choice. through all those insults the white bus driver said Parks refused to get up; of course of not obeying the law the bus driver decided on calling the police after her arrest; E.D. Nixon bailed her out of jail and was the former president of the Montgomery Bus Boycott; which led to people not using any transportation to work they only walked or took a cab. after many threats and abuse that led the way they still led the boycott to many places.

I can't read this. In your first "sentence," you have

two capitalization errors
one spelling error
one missing comma
plus it is a runon sentence.

Rosa Parks was tired which was stated in one of her quotes "i was tired, tired of giving in." though many didn't approve of this method which was refusing to give up her seat; many thought it was a great idea. Through all those insults the white bus driver said Parks refused to get up; of course not obeying the law meant that the bus driver could call the police. After her arrest E.D. Nixon bailed her out of jail and was the former president of the Montgomery Bus Boycott; which led to people not using any transportation to work, they only walked or took a cab. after many threats and abuse that led the way they still led the boycott to many places.

Rosa Parks was tired which was stated in one of her quotes "i was tired, tired of giving in." >>

Capitalization error
Comma after quotes
When and where did she say that quote?

though many didn't approve of this method which was refusing to give up her seat; many thought it was a great idea.
Capitalization error
Punctuation error

Through all those insults the white bus driver said Parks refused to get up; of course not obeying the law meant that the bus driver could call the police.
What insults?

After her arrest E.D. Nixon bailed her out of jail and was the former president of the Montgomery Bus Boycott; which led to people not using any transportation to work, they only walked or took a cab. after many threats and abuse that led the way they still led the boycott to many places.

Run-on sentence
Who was president of the busy boycott?

Isn't this supposed to be your perspective a a black rider on that specific bus? If so, you can't look beyond that day.

As Ms. Sue points out, you need to speak AS the person on the bus. If this person was a black man, he knew that if HE refused to get up he would be met with violence, possibly from the bus driver, and certainly from the police. It was Ms. Parks being a small female that brought the issue into such wide awareness of how unfair this kind of law was, but I digress. The gratitude, admiration and fear the other black riders must have felt for her at that moment must have been overwhelming. Ms. Parks was party to the discussions about social reform that were being held around Memphis at that time, so you may want to infuse your rider with that knowledge, as well. Your rider may have a family to worry about providing for, increasing the ramification's of being arrested. Ms. Parks did the thing that every black person wanted to do, but were afraid to.