Social Studies 8R - Paragraph Check

Please check my paragraph to see if it's good. If there any detials I should add please let me know. Also please let me know if there any grammar errors.

Obama Win

When Barack Obama was re-elected I was ecstatic. Obama is a really good president and he deserve to be president for the second term. For the past 4 years he done some great achievements. For example, he killed Osama Bin Laden. He didn't EXACTLY killed him but he ordered the United States special forces military unit to kill him. He wants to make sure everyone has access the "American Dream". For the next 4 years I just know he's going to complete his goals.

asked by Laruen
  1. Looks good.

    Do you see the one small correction you should make in the second sentence?

    posted by Ms. Sue
  2. yes, I'll rephrase that.

    Thank You! :)

    posted by Laruen
  3. You only need to add an "s" to "deserve."

    He DESERVES to be president.

    posted by Ms. Sue
  4. please check my my essay okayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy please let me know if there are any wrong let me know

    posted by alexis

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