Review opening paragraph for memoir

Does this work as an opening paragraph for my memoir?

You're grounded! A dad yells to his rebellious son. The son grows furious and angry, constantly wishing he could move out already and thinking about how parents are, but what if one they're suddenly gone? You never realize how special someone is until you don't have them at all. When my mother passed away, I suddenly realized how much of an impact she made on my life, and how much I really need her.

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  1. What's the difference between furious and angry?

    The second sentence needs to be 2 sentences. Where should you divide it?

    Otherwise it seems fine.

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  2. The son grows furious, constantly wishing he could move already. He keeps thinking about how his parents are.

    Is that a better way to put it?

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  3. Much better, yes.

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