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"The ability to track objects and people brings all kind of applications to mind, but it also creates concerns about privacy and civil liberties. There have been suggestions that Galileo will be like Big Brother"

Hope someone would spend a minuet reading my text and comment on things that doesn’t sound right and some grammar.

I don’t think Galileo is going to be the next generation Big Brother, you can always choose not to carry the receiver then you’re totally invisible to the satellites. But who is supposed to be watching you, the government? Why should the government us there resources to look over your shoulders? The only reason that the government should be interested in you is if you are breaking the law, and now one forces you to break the law. Much more likely is that people in general will start spying on one another, overprotective parents wanting to keep tabs on there teenage children, for example. There’s always a chance of course, that you governments will force you to carry a receiver under certain circumstances. The Department for Transport that got there headquarter in UK has already said that it would like to use the new Galileo system to track cars, motorbikes etc. so it can levy tax based on where and when you travel on the road. The main thing you are going to be worried about as a normal law abiding citizen is properly not the government and the intelligence service but commercials companies. Some commercial companies already announced services that may be intrusive and irritation. One of the many ideas, for example, is to offer people cell phones with Galileo-enabled and pre-configured in return for the rights to track there locations. The companies can then use the locations to send messages to a potential customers when near one of there stores.


I can't comment on content, but I can help you with some of the grammar issues:

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http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/notorious2.htm
Scroll down to # 238.

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm

http://www.cmsu.edu/PreBuilt/documents/USEOFFIRSTANDSECONDPERSON.pdf




Some of the concerns:
What if the government passed a law that said we must all carry our tracking devices?

:What if you disagree with official government policy, and they use your device to track and aprehend you and your group of like minded indaviduals when you gather?

:Hackers, either tracking you to be aware of when you were away from home so they can burglerize your home or, to cerate a false tracking trail to frame you for a crime they actually commited.

:All therse technologies are world spanning, so do not be falsly secure that any specific government will or can protect you from thier abuses.


Thank you very much both of you!!
You really helped me out. Going to remember the corrections to the next easy.
Thanks
Regards Morten


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