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Hello I am in 4th grade and i have wrote this poem:

i am waiting for the rain from such a Long time
this heatness is suffocating Air conditionar has just became the prime
Opening the windows and everywhere is the grime
Feel's like I am in a desert
Will it ever rain or it will stay forever hazard?
Time has passed and not a single wave of air
It should rain as now weather is slightly fair
hours passed but nothing happened
as i can see out the window Heat rays are killing me
it surely is a droght it surely is a drought

please check it and add more wording and make it perfect :)

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  1. I am waiting for the rain for such a Long time
    This heat is suffocating Air conditioner has just become the prime
    Opening the windows and everywhere there is grime
    Feels like I am in a desert
    Will it ever Rain or will it stay forever hazard?
    Time has passed and not a single wave of air
    It should rain as now weather is slightly fair
    Hours passed but nothing happened
    As I can see out the window Heat rays are killing me
    It surely is a drought, It surely is a drought.

    suggestion to end with:
    There is no way out.

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