Will someone look over my answers and think this is okay? The assignment is and I'm suppose to find the strengths and weaknesses.

I am a new publisher with some really great books to sell. I saw your announcement in Publishers Weekly about the bookseller's show you're having this summer, and I think it's a great idea. Count me in, folks! I would like to get some space to show my books. I thought it would be a neat thing if I could do some live airbrushing on T-shirts to help promote my hot new title, T-Shirt Art. Before I got into publishing, I was an airbrush artist, and I could demonstrate my techniques. I've done hundreds of advertising illustrations and have been a sign painter all my life, so I'll also be promoting my other book, hot off the presses, How to Make Money in the Sign Painting Business.

I will be starting my PR campaign about May 2008 with ads in PW and some art trade papers, so my books should be well known by the time the show comes in August. In case you would like to use my appearance as part of your publicity, I have enclosed a biography and photo of myself.

P.S. Please let me know what it costs for booth space as soon as possible, so I can figure out whether I can afford to attend. Being a new publisher is mighty expensive!

My answers are:

Strengths:
used plain english-didnt use any slang.
spelling and grammar is correct
the letter has a purpose and was straight to the point

Weaknesses
there is no targer audience
message is not formal enough
didn't do any planning or organizing of the info
didn't use the you attitude, concentrated more on there self
used abbrevations
closed letter in a negitive way, ended using PS

Yes, your answers are very good. I especially like the weakness about not focusing on what the receiver of the letter has to gain by helping the publisher. The only suggestion that I might make would be changing "didn't do any planning or organizing of the info" to something like "could have planned and organized info better" because some planning and organization was done.

Ok, thanks for your feedback I really appreicate it.

If "spelling and grammar is correct" is a strength for that communication, it is not a strength in your answer. Some errors include:

English, grammar, target, negative

I hope this helps a little more. Thanks for asking.

Your analysis of the strengths and weaknesses is fairly accurate. However, it's important to note that assessing someone else's opinion on whether the answers are okay can be subjective. It would be more beneficial for you to evaluate your own answers based on the criteria provided.

Let's break down the strengths and weaknesses you have identified:

Strengths:
1. Used plain English and avoided slang: This is a positive aspect as it ensures clear communication and avoids any confusion.
2. Spelling and grammar are correct: This indicates attention to detail and professionalism in your writing.
3. The letter has a purpose and is straight to the point: This is good because it helps the reader understand the main intention of the letter quickly.

Weaknesses:
1. There is no target audience: It is important to consider who the intended audience is and tailor your message accordingly. In this case, it would be helpful to address the booksellers explicitly.
2. The message is not formal enough: When writing a business letter, it is generally expected to maintain a formal tone.
3. Didn't do any planning or organizing of the information: It would be beneficial to structure your response with clear paragraphs addressing each point or question separately.
4. Didn't use the "you" attitude, concentrated more on themselves: It is important to focus on the needs and interests of the recipient, rather than solely on yourself, to establish rapport.
5. Used abbreviations: Abbreviations may not be understood by all readers, so it is best to avoid them.
6. Closed the letter in a negative way, ended using PS: Ending a letter on a positive note is preferable, so it would be better to avoid a negative tone in the closing statement.

To improve your answers, you could consider addressing the following points:

- Clearly define the target audience: Identify who the target audience is, such as booksellers attending the summer bookseller's show, and tailor your message to their needs and interests.
- Use a formal tone: Make sure to maintain a professional tone throughout the letter, avoiding any colloquial language or informality.
- Plan and organize your information: Structure your response with clear paragraphs, addressing each point or question separately, to enhance clarity and readability.
- Adopt the "you" attitude: Reorient the focus of your message to communicate the benefits and value you can offer to the booksellers attending the show.
- Avoid abbreviations: Use complete words or phrases instead of abbreviations to ensure clarity for all readers.
- End the letter on a positive note: Consider rewording or omitting the negative closing statement, and conclude the letter with a positive tone.

By considering these suggestions, you can improve your answers and increase the likelihood of someone perceiving them to be okay.