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Hey, can someone please proofread my work? It needed to be mostly in present participle, and I had to create a fake story about Salvador Dali's artwork, Persistence of Memory. Thanks.

SPANISH: Un chico, Paco, ha decidido andar alrededor el pueblo para vender sus relojes porque él necesita algún dinero para comprar un canguro. Sin embargo, Paco se ha perdido y él anda al centro de un desierto. El se ha olvidado de tomar alguna agua. Cuándo él ha alcanzado el centro del desierto, Paco obtiene muy sediento. Afortunadamente, Paco encuentra mucha agua cerca de un lago en medio del desierto. Desde que él sólo tiene dos manos, él tiene que salir los relojes en el desierto tan él puede llevar la espalda de agua en casa. Desde que está muy caliente en el desierto, los relojes se han fundido. Paco llega a casa seguramente, pero él no hizo dinero que vende sus relojes. El no es capaz de comprar un canguro desde que él dejó sus relojes en el desierto.

ENGLISH: A boy, Paco, has decided to go around town to sell his clocks because he needs some money to buy a kangaroo. However, Paco has gotten lost and he walks to the middle of a desert. He has forgotten to take some water. When he has reached the middle of the desert, Paco gets extremely thirsty. Luckily, Paco finds a lot of water near a lake in the middle of the desert. Since he only has two hands, he has to leave the clocks in the desert so he can carry the water back home. Since it is very hot in the desert, the clocks have melted. Paco gets home safely, but he did not make any money selling his clocks. He is not able to buy a kangaroo since he left his clocks in the desert.


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Posted by JYD on Sunday, October 15, 2006 at 9:38pm.

Hey, can someone please proofread my work? It needed to be mostly in present participle, and I had to create a fake story about Salvador Dali's artwork, Persistence of Memory. Thanks.

SPANISH: Un chico, Paco, ha decidido andar alrededor el(prep = del) pueblo para vender sus relojes porque él necesita algún dinero para comprar un canguro. Sin embargo, Paco se ha perdido y él anda(OR why not "ha andado") al centro de un desierto. El se ha olvidado de tomar alguna agua. Cuándo él ha alcanzado el(prep = al) centro del desierto, Paco obtiene muy sediento. (*** = delete the last 3 words and use "ha tenido mucha sed.") Afortunadamente, Paco encuentra (OR "ha encontrado") mucha agua cerca de un lago en medio del desierto. Desde que(OR Puesto que) él sólo tiene dos manos, él tiene que salir(** = delete and use verb "dejar") los relojes en el desierto tan (** + para que) él puede (ort = must use Subjunctive here = "pueda") llevar la espalda de agua(this doesn't match your English = llevar el agua) en(**+ a) casa. Desde(** + Puesto) que está muy caliente (not very idiomatic; better to say "hace mucho calor") en el desierto, los relojes se han fundido. Paco llega a casa seguramente, pero él no hizo dinero que (**) vende(** + vendiendo) sus relojes. El no es capaz de comprar un canguro desde(** + ya) que él dejó(OR "ha dejado") sus relojes en el desierto.

Proofreading Symbols:

ort = ortografía (spelling)
gén = género (gender)
con = concordancia (agreement of subject/verb or subject/adjective or adj/noun)
inf = infinitivo (infinitive required)
núm = número (singular/plural problem)
prep = preposición (preposition required = a, de, en, etc.)
t = tiempo verbal (verb tense)
subj.=subjuntive needed
v = verbo equivocado (wrong verb)
p = puntuación (punctuation correction needed)
voc = vocablo (wrong vocabulary choice)
imp.= imperfect needed
pret .= preterit needed
n/c = no comprendo (not clear what you are trying to say)
/\ = falta una palabra (Missing a word)
/\ /\ /\ = faltan 3 palabras (etc.) (Missing 3 words, etc.)
M/m = cambiar a mayúscula/minúscula (Change to upper or lower case)
CP = cambiar posición de las dos palabras (Change word order)
AE = abrir espacio (Open a space)
CE = cerrar espacio (Close up the space)
QA = quitar acento (Take off accent)
PN = párrafo nuevo (New paragraph)
QP =quitar palabra (Take out/omit word)
AA =añadir un acento (Add an accent)
PG = punto gramatical (Grammatical error) (Specify)
** = borrar (delete) / omit la palabra anterior (Omit the preceding word)
MD = mal dicho (not said well)

MOST IMPORTANT QUESTION. You say you need to use the Present Participle. That means the form ending in -ndo (hablando, comiendo, escribiendo, leyendo, etc.) BUT I see the Present Perfect Tense. You probably DO mean the Present Perfect Tense, which is made up of the auxiliary/helping verb "haber" and the Past Participle, usually ending in -do (leído, hablado, comido, escrito, etc.) Therefore I will leave the verbs in the Present Perfect Tense.

If you would like to correct and repost, I'll read it again!


Un chico, Paco, ha decidido andar alrededor del pueblo para vender sus relojes porque él necesita algún dinero para comprar un canguro. Sin embargo, Paco se ha perdido y ha andado al centro de un desierto. El se ha olvidado de tomar alguna agua. Cuándo él ha alcanzado al centro del desierto, Paco ha tenido mucha sed. Afortunadamente, Paco ha encontrado mucha agua cerca de un lago en medio del desierto. Puesto que él sólo tiene dos manos, él tiene que dejar los relojes en el desierto para que él pueda llevar el agua a casa. Puesto que hace mucho calor en el desierto, los relojes se han fundido. Paco llega a casa seguramente, pero él no hizo dinero vendiendo sus relojes. El no es capaz de comprar un canguro ya que él ha dejado sus relojes en el desierto.

could you proofread this again please? thanks


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thanks for your help, i meant the present perfect.

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