Can you check these sentences for me and help me find suitable synonyms?
1) Julius Caesar has just come back from a victorious (or triumphant) battle against his rival Pompey
2) Where has J. just come back from?
3) Some of his followers plot (synonym) against him and try to draw (synonym) Brutus into the conspiracy
3) Brutus meditates over the state of things. He is doubtful whether or not to take part into or to join (?) the conspirancy. He eventually decides to kill him for the good of Rome.
4)Brutus is attached (is linked to also correct?) to a disappearing world but he is also attracted by new ideas.
5)His tragic flaw is his permanent sense of nobility (how can I make it simpler?)
6) His words sound ineffectual because he doesn't take the crowd's attitude into account (into consideration is correct?)
7)On the other hand, Antony succeeds in turning the crowd against Brutus (in stirring them into conspiracy against Brutus) Can you tell me a synonym for turn and stir???
8) He succeeds in moving the crowd by his words (why is "by" and not "through"?)
9) Historical plays were popular at Shakespeare's times because people were eager to know about worlds different from their owns (is owns correct??
10) They were not prejudiced against strong rulers (is prejudiced correct?)
11) Elizabeth I ruled with an iron hand for forty-five years and England enjoyed a period of relative peace and prosperity
10)How can I rephrase the following two sentences?
11) Opposition to the King threw the world into disorder
12) If someone broke God's laws many would suffer but in the end the guillty party would be punished and order would be restored
Thank you in advance
#3 -- ... to participate in the conspiracy ...
#9 -- ... during Shakespeare's time ...
"own" not "owns"
#11 -- comma after "forty-five years"
Delete all in parentheses. The rest of the sentences are fine. For synonyms, remember to go to http://www.thesaurus.com
#11 is fine as is -- with a period at the end.
#12 needs to be two separate sentences and needs some commas after introductory clauses/phrases.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm
See #3.
1) Julius Caesar has just returned from a triumphant battle against his rival Pompey.
Synonyms for "triumphant": victorious, successful, conquering
2) Where has Julius just returned from?
3) Some of his followers conspire against him and try to entice Brutus into the plot.
Synonyms for "plot": scheme, plan, conspire
Synonyms for "draw": lure, tempt, entice
4) Brutus contemplates the state of things. He is uncertain whether to participate in or join the conspiracy. He ultimately decides to assassinate Caesar for the benefit of Rome.
Synonym for "join": become part of, engage in, join in
5) Brutus is connected to a vanishing world, but he is also drawn to new ideas.
Synonym for "attached": linked, connected, tied
Synonym for "attracted": drawn to, interested in, fascinated by
6) His tragic flaw is his constant sense of nobility.
Simpler phrase for "permanent sense of nobility": always feeling superior, perpetually noble, continual sense of superiority
7) His words seem ineffective because he disregards the crowd's attitude.
Synonym for "turn": convert, change, sway
Synonym for "stir": incite, provoke, rouse
8) On the other hand, Antony succeeds in swaying the crowd against Brutus.
Synonym for "turn": sway, convert, change
Synonym for "stir": incite, provoke, rouse
9) He succeeds in moving the crowd with his words.
The use of "by" suggests the means or method by which Antony influences the crowd with his words.
10) Historical plays were popular during Shakespeare's time because people were curious about worlds different from their own.
"Owns" should be changed to "own" for correctness.
11) They did not harbor prejudice against strong rulers.
"Prejudiced" is correct, but you can also use "biased" or "discriminatory."
12) Elizabeth I governed with an iron fist for forty-five years, and England experienced a period of relative peace and prosperity.
Rephrased sentences:
- The opposition to the King plunged the world into chaos.
- If someone violated God's laws, many would suffer, but eventually, the guilty party would be punished, and order would be restored.